Pain
It’s all I hear,
As my blood turns cold,
Like ice in the ocean of rejected love,
Like fear and anger hiding inside my black heart,
Just waiting for the rushing sensation of the stained red knife
To cut my flesh into a sorry crimson watercolour,
And haunt your very being with hate.
A ruby rose by my body,
To tell you my,
Pain
Author notes
Well, i don't know where that one came from but its kewl and its actually shape poetry. lol. how long has it taken me to be able to actually write another shape with words (2 long if you somehow care)
But i used more than ten words. they were : Blood, love, pain, heart, cold, ice, rose, knife, crimson, anger, fear, black and red.
And thats all im going to bother you with today (i think)
Cheerio
Claire-Anne (AKA- Ravenblood)
A contest entry
- Emo word bank by xlilliexdiesx.
425 points, ended May 24, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow
Like ice in the ocean of rejected love,
Like fear and anger hiding inside my black heart spot on i wish i could find somthing bad to say but i cant
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Beautiful
Crystal clear hands down one of the best I have ever sene. just an all round awesome poem that really showed alot of potential and it just sucks ass sis how you did not place but to me this is one of the ebst dark poems I have read in quite sometime. any ways very well written and great job.
Bro 
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Oh wow, I love this..I can't qoute back to you my favorite lines..I love them all..this is gripping..`Pastel
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Wow I love this! Wonderful shape you ended up with and I love the way you used the word bank.
Great work and all the best to you
Gaylene
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hehehe. lol. the shape was what i was aiming for.took me a while but i finally got it whacked into shape.
chankya Grandmama
Claire-Anne
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good job !
i love
Like ice in the ocean of rejected love,
Like fear and anger hiding inside my black heart
well done
keep writeing
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How fucking awesome is this. Emo word bank LMFAO.
Great piece, I'm working on some shape poetry too but the shapes all end up being globs like the ones that psychiatrists ask you to say what they are. Yup.
Good luckies in the contest deary.
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Chank-you sweets
OMG.. those globs are soo funny. and when you say the wrong thing, they look at you funni coz they think ur stupid for not being able to see the mona lisa in there.
but im sure you'll b able to figure out the way shape poetry workses soon. hell i dont even know how i do it.
but good luck setting up a contest
muah
Claire-Anne
btw- sorry about calling you by your name Slam
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I really like this poem, I also love how it's done.
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