spring breeze
flipping through pages
of haiku
(5/20/07)
(5/20/07)
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A contest entry
- Back to Basics Haiku by azure85.
790 points, ended June 6, 2007, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Aww this is gorgeous. I love how you've presented this, if only presentation had mattered in this contest.
A gorgeous haiku about haiku's!!
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Oh, this is a delight. I agree with the others that this could have different meanings, but I love the imagery, especially the breeze, that 'spring breeze' flipping through the pages. Lovely, good luck in the contest and all the best!
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Jo, this is perfect! Really...of all the haiku I've read, this goes towards the very top of my all-time favorites by AP poets.
The multiple meanings are just awesome. Oh, and congratulations on not having to do any editing! It really is a good feeling, isn't it?
I'll be thinking of this the next time I'm outside with a book of poetry, with the wind blowing my hair in front of my eyes so that I can't read the pages.
Good luck and best wishes,
~J.
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Refreshing
It is blazing summer here in India now and a whiff of spring breeze that you sent this way is more than welcome.
Pleasant and clear images...well-done!
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tee-hee
thats cute...
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Thank you for entering our workshop.
spring breeze
flipping through pages
of haiku
I really like this haiku. I think that Alan hit it right on the head when he commented about the different ways you can interpret this haiku. Having mutiple meanings is the magic of the haiku that first drew mw to this form. -
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Egads...I think it's the very first time I've not needed to edit an entry to any one series of these contests--REALLY! It's a nice feeling, though I'm not hardly used to it! LOL
Thanks for your comments, Polly!
Jo
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Bravo!
Dear Jo, This was a perfect way to end a day out in the garden. It is light and wonderful! Jane
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Thank you so much again for your comments, Jane!
Jo
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spring breeze
flipping through pages
of haiku
Simple and clean, giving a perfect image for the reader to reflect upon. Such as:
You - sitting outside in sunshine looking through haiku in a cool breeze with a lemonade (or is that a beer?)
A haiku book left on a table, each page being turned by the breeze.
Or the breeze personified, just looking to see what has been written about it.
Much applause
Alan
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Ummm, it was a beer--How'd you guess? You should've been out there in the yard just to see me chasing down those haiku-scraps that flew out of my notebook.
Thank you so much for your comments...As always, I truly appreciate.
Jo
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This is a very pretty Haiku. The mention of pages of Haiku is very nice.
Harrisham Minhas
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Thank you, Harrisham! the insertion of "haiku" in place of "my book" was a last minute idea, but it felt less heavy and to work better that way.
I really appreciate your comments.
Jo
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spring breeze
flipping through pages
of haiku
This is perfect, I can see the breeze flipping through your haiku book!
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Thank you, May. I really appreciate your comments, especially considering your own haiku-writing!
Jo
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I love it!
This is excellent! I can just see the pages turning. What a great haiku, perfect for the contest. Great job Jo!
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Thanks Dawn! I really appreciate these comments you left me.
Jo
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Welcome to Back to Basic!
I see you are already reading the basic stuff:
spring breeze
flipping through pages
of haiku
I think this is delightful, and perfect as is. See what Polly says when he comes by. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
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Thank you so much for these comments, Susie. I love the "back-to-basics" idea of this contest!
Jo
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