My dreams have come true.
you lie here,
on the cold cement floor,
arms lacerated from the wires
to help to stand more easily.
I guess that didn't help.
Oh, what joy.
your jaws were very difficult to seperate.
I crushed and crushed til my muscles were sore.
But I managed, I used a steak knife instead.
Begging for your life is just too painful to hear
I'm very sensitive you know, saying that a muderer was near.
I did you a favor,
I kept your mouth shut.
No need to talk to anyone but me.
And think of this, you won't have to stay
in this painful, sick, sick world.
I loved you very much,
I let you see my face.
"You freak! Go to hell!"
It's alright, I'll never leave a trace.
I showcased your eyes
On the top of my shelf
Now no more horrible visions,
See how much i cared?
Smooth as silk
my hands are
as i wipe the red icing off your clear body.
You fingers lay like dead flies on the floor,
scattered around for my delicate children.
My children, longing monthly for something to eat,
Guess what, don't worry, you are their special treat!
I love you baby...
let this be our first special night together.
Author notes
Option 12
Dear Amanda,
this is my poem. i hope you like it
Coca-Cola.- option 10!
ps. i'm not this person. lol &&&
this is one of my fav poems i've written recently...that's why its in so many contests. I want to flaunt my work. lol
read part II of this poem! (One Simple Lover Part II)
blinded sorrow- death to all option 4
i read the ruless!!--findacure's contest
A contest entry
- ~Dark Sunrise~ (dark poetry lots of options) by Ari in Wonderland.
300 points, ended May 29, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Open To Anything At All by Poetic Rage.
450 points, ended June 2, 2007, 54 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
comments are nice. please tell me what you think
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wow, violent much and right what i asked for!! i love it darling, it's marvelous!!=]
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Intense!
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WOOOAAahhh That was pretty intense shit right there... hmmm... this was pretty good.. not AMAZING, but good in my eyes... Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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great. i enjoyed this.
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sweet and tastfull peace of work thank you for joining and best of luck and my contest
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really brilliantly written i like it all the more
nightmare xx
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Sounds sadistic. I think it's well written. Good luck
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both twisted and amazing... i like it... good job and thanks for entering my contest... ^-^
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ugh. gross. i asked for a pre-write not entered into any contests. i liked it, but i do have to DQ it... unfortunately. am sorry.
-BrokenPeace
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whoops sorry
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The Pian of Love
So much sorrow in this poem like when you expressed the coldhearted methods to every move of the person in the poem......
Very dark and dreary....I liked it
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ahhaha....the intense emotions and the feel of that pain, hate and obsessive love. god..So wonderful, the ripping of the jaws is what made me cringe and want to tear off my own skin. I love it. Impressive. -
WHOA.....
THIS IS TWISTED SHIT! I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT! Very well written and worded, KUDOS! Good luck in my contest, hell, GOOD LUCK IN ALL OF THEM YOU HAVE ENTERED!
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interesting plot. good luck and thanks for entering!
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Different. Dark and kinda disturbing, lol! But not to me. The imagery in this was done well and I liked the abstractness of this. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Hmm loved by a Killer, I like this in the poem seen from this point of view it almost makes the dying worth it. great job -
I liked it. I thought it was very well written and thought out. Thank you for entering and good luck!
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Umm wow. My face was kind of like
the whole time. But then again, that's a good thing, lol. Especially for the contest.
Good luck in the contest and have a beautiful day,
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lol. thanks
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You strange psycho person!!! lol, very interesting poem and definitely very different, I was intrigued.
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lol thanks, i do my best.
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