I lay down at night, exhausted and half asleep
Looking at the pillow across from me
Only to imagine your smile shining back towards me
To imagine the gentle touch of your body against my own
The breeze of your breath massaging my neck
But when I reach out for your lips
Instead of your soft skin, I feel that same soft cloth
My pillow reminds me of one thing about you
No matter how far away from me you can be
You're always my soft pillow
Supporting and holding me close
Reminding me you will always be gentle
Until I can slowly fall asleep in your soft cover
Author notes
Option ONE: Teenage Love Poem
A contest entry
- Tell Me More ... by Asylaarix.
600 points, ended September 16, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This poem is just so cute, and creative. Really cute
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aww that is very cute. thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.
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Awwh.
I love my pillow/s too ^_^
They're so softtt.
But I never wish they were my boyfriend Lol.
Thank you for entering!
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I absolutely love the flow of this piece ... the fact that you converted your soul mate as tho that person was a pillow ... covering you like a warmth that is desperately needed ... indeed sensual ... loving ... aspiring ... and deffinately beautifully penned ... Very well done poet ... Much luck to you in the contest ... Much love 2 ya
Chantelle
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I really liked this poem. Maybe it's because we both like pillows. See my poem http://allpoetry.com/poem/3004642
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C'est l'amour...
It is love...
This was perhaps one of my favorite poems I've ever read in all my 19 years - because I've experienced this before. I would do silly things like get lost in a daydream where I think she's beside me and I try to kiss her but it was just the pillow lol. A WONDERFUL piece. I adored every word of it. Good luck on the love - well, with feelings as true as this, you won't be needing the luck lol.
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The poem is about support ...
and security, even in separation
Looking at the pillow across from me
Only to imagine your smile shining back towards me
where the beloved (Michael
) becomes the pillow so to speak. YET: it is not the physical substitute, but the symbol of the emotional which is addressed: gentleness, contentedness, safety. The support for dreams -- but real dreams ... not as wishful as a mere pillow.
A lovely poem.
Thank you for your entry and good luck in this contest.
Love
Myra
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Interesting that you are directing this to the ways we cover ourselves and cuddle up. And there are interesting metaphors that bring out the 'one' with whom you want to share this experience.
I LOVE the title most of all.
Lovely piece that meets with the criteria overall.
Thank you for entering! Warmly, CookieZeal
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Very Good
You're always my soft pillow
Supporting and holding me close
Reminding me you will always be gentle
Until I can slowly fall asleep in your soft cover
Love the ending metaphore, just beautiful
Well said in soft words
Rick
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AWW!!! That was really sweet! I loved it! I loved the last few lines the most I think. You did a great job on this poem, dear. I have to say that I was very impressed.
Megan
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