Your clumsy hands search
And as our eyes collide
Cant you see my expression?
I’m begging you to stop
Just with the dropping tears
Through the sobs, angry whispers
((You’re such a tease
I’m done with waiting))
Hot sticky hands roam free
Under my top, over my pants
Trespassing all over
Shattering my self worth
You come and go as you please
Ripping of clothes, dangerous threats
((Keep your fucking voice down
If you want to speak again))
Two naked bodies entwined
In and out, scream and shout
Sex and violence for hours
And he is getting off on it
Sticking it in me violently
Laughter ringing, smile mocking
((That wasn’t so bad..
I heard you like it rough))
Author notes
For/about a friend.
Comments appreciated.
A contest entry
- Rape[&&Disgrace] by WishMeAway--x.
450 points, ended May 27, 2007, 22 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rape & Molestation -How Easy It Is To Ruin A Life- by Dead Star--x.
600 points, ended August 3, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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what an asshole, taking what wasn't his to take. if you don't volunteer to do something, it's not supposed to be done. I hope he suffers for making you go through what he did, because what he did to you was sick.
I know how it feels to be betrayed, but not to the same lengths. sorry. -
that i heard you like it rough line made me feel like i got kicked in the stomach and has made tears escape the clutches of my eye lids
when i was molested (after i was raped) earlier this year my boyfriend thought i wanted it acording to the guy that did it he said i liked it and that i wanted it--he never got far i got free
my boyfriend was furious and he told me "you like it rough" when i was telling him about the bruises and scratches
i hate that line i hate it witha passion i know how it feels to be accused of it
it makes you want to take a knife and stab it in that persons heart-it fucking hurts & on top of all the pain youve endured that line is like salt in an open wound
thanx for entering & good luck
Cure My Tragedy -
wow... that's harsh. congrats on the gold. Thank you for sharing this with us. (was this you or ur friend? jus wondrin.) good wrok, keep it up! and good luck!
crimson -
This is emotionally sad, and I feel bad for anyone that has endured this. Let your friend live in the hope that their attacker's day will come!
Good luck in the contest
Storm -
"You come and go as you please"
This poem showed heartbreaking feeling doll.
I'm sorry she went through this, I really do hope that she is better because abuse is the worst thing in the world, and I know that it wont be easy for her to get over these feelings, but time's a healer.
Please send my love.
This was an amazing poem honey, brought back a few feelings.
Good luck to you in the contest.
This deserves a gold.
Take care.x.
Lullaby.x.
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i fell sorry for ur friend i hope she gets better soon
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awww this is sad, i feel bad about your friend. you havent put what i wanted you to in the author notes, and as good as that is, if you dont soon, im going to have to disqualify you.
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The way you wrote such a horrifying experience into such a great way is incredible. Your word choice was also good. Thank you for entering the contest!
[good.luck&take.care]
x.
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I hate lust....
This is a good write, not too vulgar in discription, not too bleeding heart victimy (though I dont mean to take anything away from how wrong the assualters actions are).
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you wrote this horrific poem so well you can see it happen in your head as you read and I think thats the most graphic part. Its an amazing poem. A good dedication to your friends torture. I guess I don't have much of a critique, its all so good. It flows so well too..good write...
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god, so sad. this makes me so mad, they think we like it.
its not rape if you like it baby
thats the one i keep hearing.
great job on this and good luck
thanks for telling the story.
♥Chaos -
Ripping of clothes, dangerous threats
((Keep your fucking voice down
If you want to speak again))
that was my favorite part,,its sad,,i would hate it if someone did that to me,,i love the poem tho
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awww that is so sad but it is really good
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Gosh that is sad.
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wow. its a good poem, even if it makes me mad.
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