Your cheek has beautiful dimple,
Legally that belongs to me,
I will not touch it rather,
Because I know it was kissed by the other.
You look beautiful in the white gown of our wedding,
I get pain by looking,
Because his name is written on it,
Anymore I can’t bear it.
I loved you more than him,
My love is like an endless fountain,
Your eyes were blocked by his mountain.
Will our relationship still be maintained?
Author notes
The title of the poem was influenced by the movie "Unfaithful".
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This is rich with the images of an unfaithful spouse. And the yearning of the faithful one to maintain the relationship yet not being sure that he can...powerful write. Emotive and well titled. Peace, Rhonda
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IS this a true tale? b.
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what does one do when they know of the act before one gets married ? .... i think desperation leads to answer them
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A painful place to be in
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Sad and painful. Betrayal known by the husband and wondering if things can ever go back to that magic time before unwanted knowledge intruded.
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lvd this
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Great! That's a word that can definately describe it; great. I like the way you've written the poem, you have a wonderful write. First of all, there is no need for corrections. Emotion is in this poem, I like that! You are always reminded that you were not her first; it seems as if it haunts you. "Will our relationshop still be maintained?" is an awesome question to ask! It makes the readers wonder on about it, it's like an unsolved mystery
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I like the way you ended with a question, nice poem.
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touchy.
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