One letter long ago in the cold winter night
You told me to stay strong and hold my heart tight
Minutes form into hours as the hours turned into days
But I'm still hoping you're heading to me on the right way
Second letter long ago in the suffocating summer air
You told me to stay waiting because you'll soon be there
Third letter long ago in the cold graveyard smoke
I swore not to cry and my tears will choke
The clock is ticking my life away
But still I stand there and pray that you're not far away
Fourth letter long ago in the meadow of dead petals and warm airs leaving
The words on your letter have succeeded in deciveing
Fifth letter long ago in the barren ground of my heart
I knew that you would soon depart
I'm crying since you're gone; I won't survive
The words on the letters were no longer alive
They're just dead
Just as I have been when you were gone
Author notes
It was short, yes. Very short... O.o But I hope you enjoy what I've written. Feedback is welcome at all times ^^
inflammible!!!! (where the heck am I supposed to put it? here or where??? O.O *spazzing out*)
A contest entry
- Give Me Something Special by Cherry.Cyanide.
500 points, ended June 26, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Short and simple... What do you think? ^^
Comments
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There's just...so much emotion put into this...
Someone so upbeat and hyper like you used to be, I never expected this out of you! It's AWESOMELY emo. XDDD -
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no one does..
I try to make myself think of something else. Everyone's confused of who I really am. At school, they think of me as the "Hinata". Hell, if I ACTUALLY SOUND Hinata, Hinata sure would have been confused of herself, laugh more often. Then when I'd go berserk, people think I'm on crack. But I just do all of it to forget myself...
man, I need to write more poetry... I have too much inspiration...
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i loveeee it. its so beautifully written. i wish i could write like this
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The ending to this was incredible.
And honestly, dont worry about short. It's a good thing
I like when people have that ability to just jump to the point.
I must ask though that you read the rules again...if you havent already, as there were a few things I did ask for that could comprimise your chances of winning. so just check back on those ok?
otherwise great, and good luck
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lol! Sorry! I've been so busy lately I just forgot what to do. >.< I'll get rite to it!
thx for teh comment. ^^ glad u enjoyed.
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Hi, I'm RockerChick2810, and I wanted to let you know that you have an amazing talent at rymeing! Good Luck in the contest!
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Thank you for the comment. ^^ that's aweful nice of u to say that. XD
cya on quizilla!~
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