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M.I.L.E

Many miles I've walked on this troubled road-

Insufficient funds and catastrophe.

Lost in despair yet inward sweetest peace

Each time troubles came I walked through them free.


Moody, mad yet meek each step I would take

Instead of stopping; caving to defeat.

Louder life did scream, in turn I was deaf

Echoed troubles fade; I- still on my feet!


Men, they came, then left- each took part of me

In turn crippled I staggered yet walked on.

‘Loner’ had its charm- I decided to

Enter through its door- I’d become its pawn.


Made to be alone, thriving, growing wise

I found inner strength walking through trials.

Left alone by life I learned quickly to

Endure loneliness walking troubled miles.

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  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    June 1, 2007
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    Congratulations on winning the gold. A well deserved winner and great poem....Sue


  • Sandygram
    June 1, 2007

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    Wonderful Write!!!!!!

    CONGRATULATIONS Melissa, on winning the Gold in Mike's contest. This was a wonderful write and deserved to win. Thank you for sharing with us. Bless you!!! You take care, Sandy


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    May 24, 2007

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    Wow

    Wonderful writing there Miss Melissa, and an interesting form as well. I think I've heard this theme before and who know - many things in life are temporary and many are permanent. Hard to separate them sometimes I guess. You're an amazing person and its been my priviledge and plasure to get to know you.

    Love ya, daughter,
    Papa Paul


  • going nowhere
    May 21, 2007
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    unbelievable! This was incredible. thanks you so much for sharing this.


  • Samplette gold member
    May 20, 2007

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    This is a powerful and amazing piece of poetry. I could hear the "lost" in your written word and feel the strength that makes you, you!!! You have so much emotion and compassion in your heart. You glow of beautiful. I wish you the best in the contest...it shines gold as far as I'm concerned.
    I didn't evern notice the repetitive acrostic it read so smoothly.
    Sam


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    May 20, 2007

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    My Dear Melissa,

    Aware as I was to your working hours, and the time you have for yourself.  I never in creation

    thought you would be coming back with a write like this.  This is just unbelievably remarkable.

    Your M.I.L.E. was given as a target, and you my friend have shot bullseye.

    To tell of past and present feelings and struggles in such a way, is phenominal.  You have brought into focus, what despair, trouble and strife can feel like, but yet, the strength you have shown previously, and again now, has shown you are a very independant person.  one who knows what they want, what they don't need, and what to do to keep on going.  your faith in yourself is commendable, and your use of 'I' lets us see, you have the required gift to go on, your wisdom has allowed you to flourish to who you are today, a sure fire winner in everyones eyes who know you.

    I take pride and honour to be called your friend, and can only say that you have walked to the 'outer limts' and back with true courage.

     

    this is going straight to where it belongs

     

    and I really do thank you for not just entering, but for sharing this write with us all.

     

    stay safe and stay tuned.

    *hug**hug**hug*

     

     



  • Robin Candor
    May 20, 2007

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    Now you're talking

    I had never thought of this format to spelling out my heart. I was blown away by your ability to stay true to the structure and yet be able to communicate your inward thoughts. This is writing at its finest. This is what the whole thing is about. This is why we are here AP. It reminds me of times when I have come up with some thought or structure that I just knew was 'all of it'. Mel, you know that I have counted you as a friend and fellow writer, but I must say persnally that I hope you like this piece as much as I do. Sometimes we shoot something off that isn't really a write that we as the writer don't really even likes ourselves. I pray you are pleased with this one as you captured my attention and I wish I had done it myself. The best compliment I can give. RC


  • Frozentearz
    May 20, 2007

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    ooh how life can push our outer limits to the test sigh,
    you have expressed well within this write that haunting feeling of how it is, but forging ahead to walk it alone,
    Bravo to you, I could really feel this write,
    Thanks for sharing a part of you.
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    May 20, 2007

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    a very creative look at life, and the trials that you've encountered along the way. Finding that inner strength to forge on alone...the poem itself flows smoothly and creates a solemn yet hopeful feel. Very well written.
    Rory


  • ShelleyA gold member
    May 20, 2007

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    A powerful write. Creative. Introspective. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Good descriptives. You expressed the 'miles' of your life and the growth from it beautifully in this piece. Good word choice, alliteration and assonance. A well crafted piece. Best wishes in the contest.

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