Once in an endless time of just an ordinary significance of daylight
Another symbolic wish came unto my depth of dreams forthright
In my selfless thoughts wondrous questions floated in my curiosity
On how mutinous you are to stay in an empty space of amity
But then again I just leave it on its own destination of originality
As our strong bond started to form on another midst of finality
Once in a lifetime you proved the worthiness of one’s right
And one is you that are among on what I blessed along the night
Those were just simple lexis but then it touched on what I imagine those times
Yet we had a miscommunication on another circumstance on mistaken rhymes
I had to be in disguise and didn’t want a similar mortal to get this meaning
Of what I conquered inside me when it was all the understanding I had that evening
As you can’t bear to see the real mislead fact that one’s acquaintance blocked the path
If that didn’t exist anytime from now everything might have been faultless in our wrath
How could someone guiltless like you plunge to useless lines she said
I had to do it to make amends and cure one’s precious aid
I wish you knew the hidden legitimacy that etched in my mind’s living
But then it was just long ago so I guess you wouldn’t recall that feeling
Author notes
well, two years ago i like this guy and this guy like me but i turn him down since i know my best friend liked him a lot so yeah i had sacrifice my feelings just for the happiness of my best friend.
i'm too loyal, ain't i?
anyway, next thing you know, my best friend likes someone else. well, damn, that really sucks. to think this guy was really close to me now we just say hi and hello...that's it.
i wish i could have a second chance but afraid that won't happen at all...oh well....
image not mine it's from this user http://nekozawafan.deviantart.com
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A contest entry
- Have Fun by Game Master.
382 points, ended June 23, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Open up your old closets and pull out the 1 by Mykeee.
1000 points, ended February 3, 2008, 47 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The First Poem you've ever written by TheQueenOfPoetry.
550 points, ended September 8, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
so can you relate?
Comments
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Wow! You have amazing talent. This was amazing especially for the first poem you've written. Great job.
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wow increadable great job
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Congrats on the two honorable mention trophies. This is my first piece to read from you... and I have to say I think it was a great way to be introduced! Your subtle rhyming was exquisite and you really knew how to lure the reader in with detail and creativity. Well done! I think I am going to enjoy my time on your page.
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hmmm
My first poem ever was Paint me a picture and it seems so juvinile compared to your entry.Thank You -
aww, the first piece i've entered here in AP.
good times, good times
omg, i seem so heartbroken here! lol!
oh well, i was infatuated when i wrote this, anyway
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I liked the way you formed this piece. It was done with a voice that seemed outside of the subject. Very well done. Thanks 4 yr entry
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Strongly worded...the end rhymes are unforced and I felt brought feelings across well. Blue
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Awe, that was interesting I think it was very good of you to think of friendship before a boy. That was a nice thing to do
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This was pulled for a soulful write, the emotions are just to die for and the wording was well placed yet at time make no sense but all the sense in the world. Well done on this one. Great write.
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thanks for the comment. yep, i tried my best to type what i can in here and glad you like this piece
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everyline by itself made sense, but it didnt really make..sense. i like how you just seemed to write. not caring, or caring, but..just going. i like that in the poem. even if it doesnt make complete sense
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thanks, hehe. yeah, there are times i have to write on even if the writer's block is like an obstacle and all. thanks for commenting.
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Wow- this is one monster poem with tons of life crammed into it.
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yeah, totally complicated but that's the past that i've been through and this is the present so i am a-ok
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Wow, this is awesome, and I really love the way it flows. I can tell you put a lot into this.
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yep, i placed all i can in here. thanks again for commenting!!!
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Nice Write
You are really a loyal friend I just hope it didn't go unnoticed. Also I love the way you write.
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tnx, well, sometimes being too loyal is painful but after all seeing your friends hurt is much more painful, anyway! hehe
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*smiles* The chances of it actually being that forever kind of love is always slim. There are so many that come through our lives and move on who we only stop and barely say hello anymore. I'm 28 years old and its still a very short list for me as well. Take care and keep your heart safe.
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no worries, i will keep my heart safe. thanks for the concern and especially the comment! well, right now love life's empty but i won't get any complicated pain in my heart anyway! anyway, gonna comment on one of your poems
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