I love it when my mom gives me a kiss,
Awakens me from my sorrow and takes me to bliss
I love it when my mom takes me in her arms and sings
And suddenly the whole world means nothing
Here is my world, Here is my reason for living
My Snow White, Cinderella, everything!
I so dont think she will ever see..
That she's the world's most most most beautiful mother
There can be no no no no nobody other
Like it or not, even though she maybe a lot like yours,
She's not the same..
And yeah yeah yeah, she's the most loving ever
You wouldn't know better, in your life, never
She,
Shes's a dream,
She's my eternal queen
She's the best damn thing my eyes have ever seen!
Author notes
I have tried a parody of Avril's song, 'The best damn thing'..
Here are the original lyrics..
i hate it when a guy doesn't get the door
even when i told him yesterday and the day before
i hate it when a guy doesn't get the tab
and i have to pull my money out and that looks bad
where are the hopes, where are the dreams
my cinderella story scene
when do you think they'll finally see
(chorus)
that you're not not not gonna get any better
you won't won't won't you won't get rid of me never
like it or not, even though she's a lot like me
we're not the same
and yeah yeah yeah i'm alot to handle
you don't know trouble, i'm a hell of a scandal
me, i'm a scene, i'm a drama queen
i'm the best damn thing that your eyes have ever seen
** I hope you like it **
um, if you have heard the song, this REALLY is singable with the music.. YAY!
A contest entry
- **Blue Eyes and Secret Smiles by madgirlslovesong.
525 points, ended May 29, 2007, 18 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Interesting song. I like parodies and covers, but this really had nothing to do with the topic. I like the way you worked it though. It's a good tribute to your mom.
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The rhyming does seemed a bit forced, but other than that, i like this. good luck in the contest, and thanks for sharing! :]
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Ive heard most of her songs and thats cool that you made a parody thats singable with the music that takes talent the main song was pretty good a little short but good best of luck to you in the contest
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when you start the poem your rhymes seem forced... But after that it improves grealy...
I havent heard the song so i dont know if it fits very well to that
thanks for entering
good luck -
I love that song by her! very nice poem. your mom sounds cool. hehe.
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KOOL WRITE!
Hey Shuvi, mast parody hai! i bet u shud sing this to aunty, she wud b eternally happy nd blissfull...mayb on the result day...u wud give her double hapiness then ! awesum lyrics...gud rythm...gud flow...better dan the original ! nice thing u used avril 4 inspiration, keepin in mind "u...the avril fanatic" ! luved dis 1...gud luck in both da contests! i m sure u r gonna win at least in the "blue eyes" 1, and with mi gud luck message, i think u will definitely win (meri chhatra chhaya mein jo rehte hain unkaa swagat sadaa jeet hi karti hai (jain ma'am dwara padhai gai parshuram ki pratiksha yaad aa gayi thi...swatantra unke kadam choomegi )...sadaa jeeto evam apne doston ko prassan rakho )gud luck sweety pie!!! u truly deserve dese applauses...
Luv, ♥
Madhumita
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Hey Shuvi, great job with this
Love the flow and the can feel the rhythm. Excellent lyrics too.
Awesome write and good luck to you
Gaylene
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shuvi, this is beautiful and should be tweaked into lyrics I bet your mom would love this, especially if you could sing it to her. Wow! I really do love it, your wording and rhymes just sit so right upon the page Well done with this and thank you so much for sharing your sunshine smiles through your gifted and creative pen. Love you always. Mum
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