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Treading Water


I could never understand
which path to take, to make me a better man,
treading water every day,
everything but the pain and fear began to fade away.

If I could replay over and over,
just one small minute of my life,
which minute would it be?
would it be the first minute that you told me that you loved me?

Or would I hold something else
that’s imprinted deep into my heart,
another small minute full of bliss,
as we stood there as the world went by, deep in our first kiss.

I could never hope to be
better than the ugly thing that I have always seen,
treading water every day,
I run and hide from what I am, but I can’t get away.

So many moments to hold onto,
every single one is spending time with you,
I somehow let it all go amiss,
now there will never be another minute, cradled in your kiss.

The clock has ground to a halt
and all my precious minutes are up,
my heart has fallen from the skies
and all I want is another minute looking into your eyes.

Happiness is all I ever dreamed
but I always made it harder than it seemed,
treading water every day,
my time is now up, and there is nothing that I can say.

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06/30/07 - For Contest

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    May 20, 2008
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    :(( me too... that's all I can say, I am there, have been and fear I always will be.


  • PerfectImperfection
    August 19, 2007

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    This is a very deep and painful revelation; learning how to swim. Well written, deep, dark, and expressive. Thank you for your entry!


  • Mrs-Gollihue
    August 4, 2007

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    Good Job

    I liked this poem very much. I enjoyed how you went from talking about the first time the person you are talking about said they loved you..and then on to your first kiss. Both of these things are equally important and you expressed that very well. Keep up the great work and thank you for entering in my contest. Best of luck to you.


    • Glasyalabolas
      August 4, 2007
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      Thank you.

      At the time I was right at the beginning of what was happening (break-up), so this was a bit difficult and painful to write. Gladly, things have completely changed around now and everything is back on track.