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By The Light Of The Steel-Blue Suns


It was like a sunrise when she opened her eyes,
the light would stream from those twin steel-blue suns,
filling the room and grabbing you straight by the heart,
leaving you reeling until you thought you were going to drown in them.

She is a very special soul,
she tries to hide it, downplay it, deny it,
but sometimes when she doesn’t realise her guard is down,
that soul stands and shines so bright it could blind you.

It shines through those eyes and her smile.

All the years I experienced it, even when I didn’t realise it,
it made my own pathetic soul stand tall and sing;
all those years it felt I was standing atop a glorious mountain
and I was touching the very hand of God.

Now that is all gone,
but this is not where I go over it again,
causing myself more suffering and pain;
this is about her beauty.

The light is still in those eyes,
but now they shine for someone else.
the suns have set on me, leaving a long, cold night,
but what an absolutely glorious day.

I find myself still glancing over when she isn’t looking,
all I keep seeing is her beauty
and I can hear the gasp as my breath is taken away and my heart pounds,
I keep thinking she’s noticed and I feel naked, exposed, embarrassed.


I always thought I was a “night” person;
I now know, I truly love the steel-blue light,
so hear I am, naked, exposed and longing, stuck in the night,
longing for a sunrise that I may never see again.


Author notes

Option 2: Write a poem telling someone just how much you miss them. Please write it for someone still with us. I think it’s important to touch someone’s heart while we still can.

This is about my strongest passion, my love for my partner of 14 years. Last year went through a bump in the road, so to speak and thought I had lost her for good, so wrote this to get down what I saw and how I felt about her (especially at the time, despite everything that had happened/was happening).

Luckily things changed and life is now back on track as it should be and my passion has and never did change, not even for one second.

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  • ms-cuddles
    October 19, 2008

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    Such a lucky woman to have such a wonderful soul in love with her. I can feel this all through me so I know it warms her heart. Thanks for entering and good luck. Hugs~ Cuddles


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 8, 2008

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    Wow; this was so deep, deeply powerful. Your emotions I can tell just pour from your heart & soul onto here.
    This was such a beautiful and touching write.

    Thanks for entering & best of luck

    • Glasyalabolas
      September 26, 2008
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      Thank you kindly. I have a soft spot for this piece, thus I enter it into a lot of contests, even though it never wins aything lol


  • flyingphoenix
    June 1, 2008

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    loved it! i loved how you were speaking of your longing for her beauty. I'm glad to read in your AN things are getting back on track for you.

    great write, thanks for entering and good luck!

    Sunny

    • Glasyalabolas
      September 26, 2008
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      Thank you very kindly. Very glad myself, not to mention surprised that it happened, even now.

      (Sorry for the long delay in replying)


  • phynix
    May 24, 2008

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    This poem was AMAZING, it rly shows how much you love her. also, i loved all the imagery and metaphors


    • Glasyalabolas
      September 26, 2008
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      Thank you very much, glad you enjoyed it.

      (sorry for the delay in replying).


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    May 12, 2008

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    I'm sorry you know how this feels, I can relate to this all so much as I've had my heart broken many times and I can't get over it, not even now... It just haunts me and hurts me and I cry about it all the time, alone as thats when I am the safest. Beautifully written, message me anytime you want to talk.


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    April 24, 2008
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    Thank you for your most beautiful entry, good luck, Josie


  • only1love4ever
    March 28, 2008

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    Only1love4ever-Reply

    This is gorgeous. Beautiful steel blue suns. It shows your passion for this woman, how strong you long to be with her. The need and desperation in your heart to have her in your arms again. Love casts its spell upon us all one time or another, i am just glad to see that the love you have for her, never died when the bump hit, be strong and keep on keeping on. Good luck and thankyou!! :]

    • Glasyalabolas
      April 6, 2008
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      Thank you very much. When we split and I wrote this, I never thought we would ever be back together again.

      Just goes to show what I know, I guess lol.


  • fairytalelovestory
    October 29, 2007
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    very pretty i liked this good luck


  • dreamfinder
    October 18, 2007
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    So honest and forlorn. I liked it and am glad you did see the sunrise again. Good Luck


    • Glasyalabolas
      October 18, 2007
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      Thank you. Things worked out very well, when I never thought they ever would.


  • forbidden-colour
    August 26, 2007

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    Aw.
    the ending was lovely;

    "Longing for a sunrise that I may never see again"

    Thank you for entering

    x

    • Glasyalabolas
      August 26, 2007
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      Thank you.

      The real beauty is that, I did see that sunrise again. I make no secret that this piece is about my ex-partner, who I was with for 13 years. We split in early April and this was one of the first pieces I wrote after a long, long layoff of many years from writing. Despite the split I still felt the same and, three months later, we were back together again. So it makes this piece mean even more.

  • Samantha Amergirdol
    August 11, 2007

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    So beautiful and packed with emotion...! I really enjoyed it, and I love how you expressed yourself. Great job!

    Thanks for entering!

    • Glasyalabolas
      August 11, 2007
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      Thank you. It is one of my favourites, especially since I have experienced a huge turnaround since and things are back on track.


  • LadyLeviathan silver member
    August 7, 2007
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    beautifully written! i loved this. thank you for entering and following all the rules!


  • Regretlove
    July 31, 2007
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    I loved this! Thank you for entering!


  • Anfractuous
    July 23, 2007
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    Wow...beautiful. It tells it all right there. Nice, and good luck.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    July 1, 2007

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    I really love this. My favorite lines are :
    It was like a sunrise when she opened her eyes
    The light would stream from those twin steel-blue suns
    Filling the room and grabbing you straight by the heart
    Leaving you reeling until you thought you were going to drown in them

    Thank you for your entry xxxx Best wishes

    • Glasyalabolas
      July 2, 2007
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      Thank you. Even though this was one of the first pieces I posted up on AP, and it is now just over two months on, I probably feel this now stronger than I did when I wrote it.

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