The windows of the car fogged up
and we sat there in the back seat
stark naked and just staring
I was cold and apologized
something's wrong with me tonight
and though you looked delicious
For some reason I couldn't stand the fact
that you'd be just another name in that
little black book I keep beneath my sheets.
Rolled down the window as I lit up my cigarette
to let the smoke fly out
an early goodbye
before I get out of your car
(your 1970 chevy)
and walk home
with my head held high
and the warmth between my thighs
adding to my discomforting failure.
Author notes
ShatteredLullabies
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"The windows of the car fogged up
and we sat there in the back seat
stark naked and just staring"
Great beginning :]]
"Rolled down the window as I lit up my cigarette
to let the smoke fly out
an early goodbye
before I get out of your car
(your 1970 chevy)
and walk home
with my head held high
and the warmth between my thighs
adding to my discomforting failure."
Love that stanza, especially the last two lines.
Great job bb, thanks for entering! <33
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