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Out of the Blue

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Out of the Blue

 

Out of the blue I am torn from my pain

I was drowned in a sea of my grief

Released from despair my dreams are sane

All sorrows gone with love and belief

Love of racing to you, I can’t remain

Legacy of hearts united my relief 

.

Poetry of transformation relief

Ocean currents can’t hold my pain

Equestrian freedom to forever remain

Transformed by you preventing grief

Released from my soul that’s my belief

Yearning for you has kept me sane

 

Released from myself, so free and sane

My heart is the ocean, my mind in relief

Ripped from my bonds, It is my belief

Stampede from the bondage, out of the pain

I feel so free and relieved of grief

I know I’ll be safe, with you I’ll remain

 

I love you so, please let me remain

Released from myself, with you I am sane

My heart is the ocean, my mind out of grief

Released from my bonds, I gallop toward relief

Stampede from the bondage, out of the pain

Freedom with you, that is my belief

 

Lost in that void without conscious belief

Ripped from that tide, I will not remain

Coming out of myself torn from the pain

To melt with your soul is keeping me sane

I come into you for my loving relief

My stead is quick, to race from the grief

  

Safe in your stable I forget my grief

No more suffering, a higher belief

Charging ahead, for loving relief

My soul is now free, with you I remain

Saddled in you and feeling so sane

Escape from the blue, with no more pain

   

You have taken away my grief, forever with you I shall remain.

So free with you it’s my belief that with your love I will stay sane

Unlocked in you is my relief, out of the bonds of the sea of pain

Author notes

This poem is constructed in three styles. acrostic, sestina, and rictameter

Acrostic Poetry is where the first letter of each line spells a word.


Rictameter is a scheme similar to Cinquain. Starting your first line with a two syllable word, you then consecutively increase the number of syllables per line by two. i.e. 2, 4, 6, 8, 10 Then down again, 8, 6, 4, 2 Making the final line the same two syllable word you began with.


The sestina is a strict ordered form of poetry, dating back to twelfth
century French troubadours. It Consists of six six-line (sestets)
stanzas followed by a three-line envoy. Rather than use a rhyme
scheme, the six ending words of the first stanza are repeated as the
ending words of the other five stanzas in a set pattern. The envoy
uses two of the ending words per line, again in a set pattern.

First stanza, ..1 ..2 ..3 ..4 ..5 ..6
Second stanza, ..6 ..1 ..5 .. 2 ..4 ..3
Third stanza, ..3 ..6 ..4 ..1 ..2 ..5
Fourth stanza, ..5 ..3 ..2 ..6 ..1 ..4
Fifth stanza, ..4 ..5 ..1 ..3 ..6 ..2
Sixth stanza, ..2 ..4 ..6 ..5 ..3 ..1

Concluding tercet:
middle of first line ..2, end of first line ..5
middle of second line ..4, end of second line..3
middle if third line ..6, end of third line ..1

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  • The Poetic Angel
    June 3, 2008

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    Wowwwww Awsome 2 of my fav forms in my newly lerned one this is fantastik ...cant wait till i can do this form well enuff to try this out .... congrats on the Gold it was very very well deserved

    xxx cheeky xxx


  • creationsfromheart
    April 22, 2008

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    ok this is a form I don't think I have ever seen, yes I have seen all the forms but never combined into one write, I would take on this challange but I think my head would explode by the second stanza this is really great and well worthy of the gold!


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    April 12, 2008
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    Beautiful silver Amera...
    Congrats...
    Many blessings
    ~A~


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    April 10, 2008
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    wow...an excellent write...
    Very well done..
    Bravo...
    Many blessings
    ~A~


  • Swan song gold member
    April 9, 2008

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    This poem took a lot of work. I will study it more as the days come along. Well done and written with maximum effort on form. Will read this again with pleasure


  • aGent Lemon
    March 7, 2008

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    This Is Definately Over The Top

    The message itself is very beautiful, and for me to acknowledge that you added acrostic, sestina, and rictameter to it, I have to say that I'm very much impressed. Admittably... I had to look up the word "equestrian" because my range vocabulary is rather average, but that's perfectly fine with me.


  • WolfHeart
    January 27, 2008

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    Whew, you ran the gamut of poetic forms in this one.
    Well-written, great imagery and fun to discover each form. Congrats on the bronze!

    Wolfie


  • BellaD
    January 27, 2008
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    Beautiful poem!

    I'm impressed with this piece...it's rather like three poems in one. Not sure if it is the picture of the surf or the repetition inherent in a sestina, but the lines seemed to roll in on waves. Very natural feeling to your elegant verse. Thank you for your entry.


  • Nevel
    November 13, 2007

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    WOW,this is really beautifull!!not only the complicated form,but also your lines.very great!nice love-poem also.Deep thoughts.I'm impressive!you're a very skilled poetress.


    • Amera gold member
      November 13, 2007
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      hehe... thank you; sorry, I just had to show off after your last comment. I love your comments, thanks again.


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    August 6, 2007

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    Getting through one stage of this extremely competitive competition is one thing. But to be up against some of the entries so far, makes it a daunting task. This one on the other hand, makes it darn right near impossible to compete against (well, in my eyes anyway). I realise that to be in with a chance, we all have to pull out the big guns, but you my friend have brought out the entire broadside of your Galleon of poetic justice, and blasted what can only been taken as a shot that will cause a sinking feeling to any who sumbit anything less than their best, their utmost best of the best.

    I, like a few others in this battle, am now making my way back to the safety of the shore, where without doubt, will be srummaging around the entire island of mindful thoughts, and trying to built a line of defence that will give one chance of surviving through to the next battle.

    Might even have to call up the reserves for this one.

    I admit, I have a quivery quill at the moment, but I won't give up without rethinking my strategy. And having a few days left to gather my thoughts, I will return, armed with everything I have.


    now, where did I leave my sumbarine.....?




    • Amera gold member
      August 6, 2007
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      Mike

      How can I thank you for such a wonderful comment, I am truly humbled. I was hoping the point of this poem wasn't too deep for most people. Thank you for your constant support.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • Swan song gold member
    May 30, 2007
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    That is beautiful and just flows with your talent. What a wonderful poem. I love everyting about it!!!

  • mama-drama
    May 21, 2007

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    It would take me a whole year to deliver such a genius piece of work.You wrote it well, I really enjoyed it and I have learnt a lot.Its amazing how your words blend in so well and yet deliver their meanings so perfectly.This is great.

    Tessa


  • Whoochi gold member
    May 21, 2007

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    Oh Dollface ,, what can i say, this is absolutely dedication and straight from your heart about what this site means to you! You are truly my inspiration, my teacher and my dollface friend...Smoochies to you and Best of luck...if this does not win something, I ma going to cause a stink...beautiful form and structure and again, teaching me about different forms.....Beautiful Miss ya Drop me a lifeline....


  • thepoetssoul
    May 21, 2007
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    Ithought it was wonderful good rythem.GOODJOB!!!


  • crivanea silver member
    May 20, 2007

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    ok..u are officially a new favorite of mine..wow..do u know how much i envy u?? u wrote a sestina!!!..i tried and tried and tried..but mine turned out to be terrible..and not only did u combine more than one forms into a poem..u made it interesting..concrete..and simple amazing!!..wonderful piece!


  • Desire gold member
    May 20, 2007

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    Dangggggggggggg!!

    Can it get any better than this
    I DON'T THINK SO
    What a Powerful Brilliant piece You have penned and to do in not one, not two but three separate styles blending into one verse~ but bringing forth three separate messages so harmoniously
    Dangggggggggggggggg~

    Loved it!!
    More please...eats popcorn while waiting

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent busy bee!
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • Swan song gold member
    May 20, 2007
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    That was stunning. What a beautifl work! Three poems in one. Like always the flow is smooth. Three poems in one and al three poems are excellent. All I can do is bow down and say I am not worthy.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 20, 2007

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    You've surpassed yourself this time, that's for sure! I was going to enter this contest, but I'm not sure it'd be worth it now with such steep competition. A rhyming sestina (the hardest form & I should know...I tried it) with rictameter and acrostic all wrapped in velvet! This is a beauty! Go girl!
    Thanks for sharing.
    Love ya
    La x

    • Amera gold member
      May 20, 2007
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      Thank you so much Laura. This was in response to a poem I entered earlier. It was judged immediately as soon as I posted it before I had a chance to edit it so I deleted it. Don’t stop from entering it, this is only a first round. You’re the best poetess on the site and we need you to beat the guys.


      • matthew-
        May 21, 2007
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        should have the quickness of not needing to edit with that quick tounge. viewed, perhaps commented on, not judged. not trying to start a match, be nice. =)


  • FallingTwilight
    May 20, 2007

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    Wow, I love this. You must have put a lot of hard work into this, but it came out beautiful.

    Good luck in the contest and have a wonderful day.

    FallenPoeticAngel

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