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You Took Me In



Gold is plated on what we think is real
Rich is day because we manifaste it
All that is not right
But you painted my sky

I came into the world they called "Public School"
I was cold as day
Scared with might
But you took me in
Even though I was a broken kite.

I was ruthless, and mean
No one wanted me
But you took me in
Even though I was worthless and fightful

You taught me right from wrong
Put books in my hands
Told me to always write in my best
Because you took me in
Even though I was not at flight

I did as you said
I made my bed
I tried my best
because you took me in
Even though I was a fading light...

 

 

Author notes

To my dearest teacher, coach Malone. He helped me through my transition from homeschooled to Public school. I wasn't the greatest person to be around, but he just keep encouraging me to do better. He was the first one to read my poetry. He always encouraged me to write more. I would not be where I am today if it wasn't for him.

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  • DarkWind
    May 22, 2007
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    good job

    but some of you tranistions are alittle awkward but over all a very powerfull and moving poem.


    • Darkkitty
      May 22, 2007
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      Yeah I know, but it was kind of a hard poem to write. :/


  • LittleAnn
    May 20, 2007

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    A wonderful dedication to a teacher that really seems to have helped you, even if he "wan't the greatest person to be around".
    Thank you for entering my contest and sharing this beautiful write.
    Keep on writing and good luck!
    Annie