HUSH!
You give yourself away
Only with sound
Well I hear you
And so the game begins
still you whisper
I whisper from afar
And I get farther
and farther
away
From the sound I make
I beg
I continue
Yet you walk away
For I cannot see you
You never left
Yet I have
You stay within
never have I been
Ever so close?
no..so dark
So confused?
I'm losing you
You're losing me
I am, losing me
You never left
So the game begins
To find us from within
no
To find yourself
no
To find self
I already have
You continue to walk away
I'm right here
But how?
I'm here too
Also..here
And i always have
Still, i never saw
nor touched
I never left
It's not over
It never started
I'm still here,
and so are you
I'm me
You're I
Only for the time being,
I felt as if i were lost
And lost myself
It got dark
But I was still here
I went insane
But it was only a game
And I found myself once again.
You found nothing
For I was never lost
only confused
and it got dark
Now I'm back, right here
And here
I always was
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Cool. Very nice. I really like the layout and simple choppy line structure and vocabulary, it really made this poem great, and flow amazingly well into the mind. It really had a kind of actual tangible mental beat going to it. nice work.

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wow
wow, this was really abstract! At one point I kind of gave up on understanding it, but then I did again. I love how you were able to use concrete poetry to help you write this piece, it adds to the confusion that it's supposed to be (I think anyway). My favorite part was how you wrote "And I get farther
and farther
away" I thought it was really great! It gave me a sort of nice feeling in the end, I liked it



