She awoke surrounded by darkness
then the pain came unbelievable pain
suspendid above the floor by chains
her body bruised and battered
her muscles on fire burning with searing pain
blood running down her flesh
then she remembers .
She screams from the memories as well as the pain
her mind in torment from the abuse she has suffered
so abused defiled and degraded savaged
blood and other fluid trickling down her legs
from her center her whole body sticky
from blood and other unnamable fluids
how could this happen
how can any of this be real
the horror of what has happened striking her
like a physical blow
how long have I been here she wonders
four days five no way of knowing
kept in the dark hung like a piece of meat.
she remembers being in her bed
waking to a noise thats when she was taken
there were three of them
abducted held in a dark cell a prisoner
she remembers hangin for what felt like several days
then they came to her bringing with them light
she see's their faces for the first time
at first all they did was stare at her
then they approached touching her she twisted
away from their touch thats when they struck her
repeatedly they hit and slapped her
bit her naked breast and she screamed
then they lowered her to the floor
and then ,then the true horror begin
they begin to violate her savagely like beast
no compassion or remorse they were brutal
enjoying her pain devastaing her almost to her soul
her body not her own now but theirs
degraded at their will for their enjoyment
every orafice bleeding from their abuse
not knowing just how much more she could take.
Just when she thought the horror could get no worse
it happened
her body numb now she lay there as one of them
used her taking his pleasure from her flesh
he beging to change as she watched in terror
his face begin to lengthen his teeth became fangs
hair was growing covering his body
his arms and legs distorted bones snapping
as they lengthened and reformed
until their was nothing human left
just a beast a beast who violated her
raped her
the sheer terror raping her mind as well as her body
she screams and screams until there is nothing
nothing but darkness and silence ,oblivian
then she awoke hanging once again
tears streaming from her face
her body in unimaginable pain her heart
so full of terror and her mind so close to madness
they have returned several times
to perform their evil upon her body and her mind
she hears a noise her heart racing filled with fear
she listens ...footsteps oh god no not again
please not again let it be over pleaseeeeee
she hears the door being unlocked and it opens
they have returned they enter the her cell
she pleads and begs please nore more please
and for the first time one speaks to her
dont worry little one your pain is almost over
you have well satisfied our lust
we shall not take pleasure from you again
heart filled with relief she says thank you
tears once again pouring down her face
her mind racing thinking its over its actually over
he stares at her face filled with relief
and says oh my I believe you have misunderstood me
I said we shall use you no more
for although our lust is quenched now we hunger
then all three started to change
in moments three beast stood before her
salive dripping from their gastly maws
and they begin to approach.
She screams her mind now broken she screams
screams at the unholy pain and terror
as they beging to devour her flesh
madness takes over as they now eat her alive.
Author notes
caution this write is a horror it contains it contains vivid discriptions of violence abuse assault and other disturbing things so if this isnt your kind of write go no further and do not read I do not wish to offend anyone and if this is your kind of write I hope you like it ,
A contest entry
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I like anything that captures my mind in the first few sentences and you sure did that. Very well done.
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Wow, different...
I really would like to say something new...
I like it,
it is very nice...
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Wow.
I wish I could say something that hasn't been said. You're poem is completely Iron. It's amazing because the horror in it, I was tipping my head before I even saw the screen and caught onto the words. I applaud your bravery for sharing.
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woah.
jesus christ. that is heavy. that is physical horror at its best. i love it and hate it at the same time. i love the writing, but i hate the subjet, although it is a good subject choice and you are very brave for attempting it.
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Loved It
It was gruesome and purely evil.
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wow, i am absolutly speechless! for once i really dont know what to say this is omg um amazing for lack of a fitting word or words lol
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I like it
I don't really like fantasy like this most of the time, my theory on this is that a story like this has to have a feel of truth about it. It doesn't have to be true, it just has to feel like it may have some little bit of truth somewhere in it. This being said, i actually liked you writing, perhaps it was how it was taken from the victims point of view, something haven't really seen all that much before, but i like this story. Keep on writing my friend.
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ewww... but intriguing. Don't worry nothing ever shocks me lol a fantastic horror write. Very dark and disturbing and I loved it. Fantastic write!
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Very scary and terrifying. I am huge fan of horror. I really loved it. Great job.
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Very good, I like it alot...
Thanks for entering
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very chilling. A few places I had to read over, but I think it was because of a typo. But wonderfuly done
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Very good
This writing is very creative and I envision alot of this in my mind. I hoping it would be more and I am thinking of taking a horror writing class at allpoetry and the teacher was just showing the example of this. It is very vivid to me and I think I would like to reread this again and again.
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wow it was different
graphic and twisted but good in a evil type of way . nicely done My friend
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it is good i like it the fantasy the horror it is all brilliant well done
nightmare xx
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whoa....
i ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS PIECE! THIS IS SICK, SADISTIC, TORTUROUS, FUCKIN AMAZING!! Very well written, i love how graphic you were witht he violence and all, a very well write, i love your mind!!!! -
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thank you so much i am very glad you liked it i am now writing it as a book i wrote a second part to this and there are more to follow but the second part the terror is in a different form please id love your oppinion on it the name is the savage spirit
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Wow This is so dark and chilling and an incredible write. The imagery was awesome. Such evil and torment. Quite an imagination you have. Good to see you writing again!
Jeannie
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amazing details
not my usual read but i was curious and wanted to read on...you did a great and intense job creating a very vivid and detailed story...i wonder if it's just a story of if it has any deeper symbolic meaning -
good...
really good... i liked the part that said... "we shall not take pleasure from you again
heart filled with relief she says thank you
tears once again pouring down her face
her mind racing thinking its over its actually over
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*locking my door and never letting you in* lol. ok, you got me on this. i wasnt sure on how the ending would go, and bravo, uve surprised me. It felt like i was her at the times of most agony, and then it seemed like i was an onlooker. keep it flowing, just not so twisted next time plz lol
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lol my friend your warning is in the authros comment box >.< that means they see it after teh read lol anyway it is a good poem, I think ti would make a better story but that is me. Anyway really great job!
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awesome job. you really pulled the reader into your story with the vivid descriptions. It was a fantastic write.
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thank you very much I am glad you liked it
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Such vivid imagery and the fluidity of the language. This is a really remarkable piece, as well as well written. Keep up the great work!
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wow
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Good Write
I love the Horror in this Write...Very Twisted and Maniacal...
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this is one of the most twisted, morbid, satistic writes I have ever had the honor of reading!! One word, WOW! keep it up, two thumbs up!.
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