I want you to stay
It doesn't have to end this way
I love you, forever and ever
We were meant to be
Last night was just a mistake
It didn't mean a thing to me
Forgive me, forgive me
I'll be true to you
It doesn't have to be this way
I can do better
I can be all you want me to be
Give me a chance to prove myself to you...
You are my everything,
You are what I've searched for my whole life
You are my whole world
Now you're leaving me
Please, stop.
I can't breathe without you
I can't live without you
Please, stay.
I can go on and on
Telling you how much I need you by my side
Will you listen?
Will you tell me you forgive my mistakes?
I want us to be okay.
I want everything all right.
Make it like it used to be
Love so strong a hurricane couldn't break it apart
I can hardly breathe,
You make me want to cry
Until you come back to me
Just tell me why does it have to end like this...
A contest entry
- ♥ Letters ♥ by Atrophya.
600 points, ended August 28, 2007, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Horribley written... don't hold back- I can take the criticism
Comments
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Oh wow, this is sad, I've been here so many times, hold on there, you'll make it through. I promise.
GL in the contest
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what critism? it wasnt bad...though it could take a little work. personaly i thought it was fine.
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Not horribly written - the only mistake I caught was in your author's notes! lol
I totally felt the desperation and need, along with hurt and fear. You may not believe this, but I think this is one of the best poems you've ever written. I mean that - I really like this one, both for the message and what your use of words brings to mind.
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i think i love you...
but seriously i love your comments... i in no way think this is one of my best poems but that mainly may be because of the fact that i like short, to the point poems. and this one is quite longer than my normal ones. but thank you so much for the comments!!!! they mean a lot!
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