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[ Lie to me, ]

Lie to me,
I promise I'll believe,
i'll do anything,
for this pain to relieve.

 

to hear you voice once more,

hear you call my name,

hear you tease my mind,

mould me into your game.

 

but yet left here by myself,

hearing the pain of my own screams,

then i have to close my eye's,

to see the pain of my owns dreams.

 

i bully myself,

remembering you bullying me,

trying to break out,

so i can finally be free.

 

maybe you'll come back,

maybe you'll come tease,

maybe this will be all be over,

leave my mind at ease.

 

so my darling come back,

stop me before i have to grieve,

so lie to me my darling,

i promise you i'll believe.

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I will see the movie 'In Bruges' in 2008 when it's released

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  • Swan song gold member
    September 23, 2007

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    Not to bad very good rhythm I can hear some natrual voice rhythmns in this poem so the talent is there


  • Morgaine
    July 4, 2007
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    I love that you said "I bully myself, remembering you bullying me" because it expresses the emotion of the line you chose: lie to me I promise I'll believe. 'Desperate' is not the right word - rather 'vulnerable' and very human and raw. Love it! Thank you for entering and good luck! Love, Morgaine

  • Red Soulja 187
    May 20, 2007

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    oh man i've been there.. sadness.. well i hope you dont feel like that now cause it sucKs miserably!!
    you wrote this very well!! good job!


  • Emotionless-brat
    May 19, 2007

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    hmmmm...
    well must say i did injoy ur poem...yep-yep
    but its sad=(... well i think it was really good sweet job....


  • ThnxsForTheMmrs-x-
    May 19, 2007
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    This is very sad, yet really good. lol, yea i know i make no sence.
    keep it up.


  • Crazy-Baby
    May 19, 2007
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    =( sad poem chki, whos it about? hope ur ok x x

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