Pain flickers across the void;
unrelenting sorrow that weaves
through spiraling black vapor...
...taunting and threatening miasma;
promises a suffocating embrace.
A contest entry
- ~~~AHA...AGAIN #2~~~ by phoenixonfire.
300 points, ended May 19, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Shady Lady ...
Very deep, very dark, very sinister in its atmosphere.
Such a black piece of writing to be penning...how tragic!
Nicely written, though
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Very nice,I love your words...well done.
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Impressive word usage and I like the deepness of the write! U wrote like me and I am impressed There is a deeper meaning in this write..the phrase..promises a suffocating embrace is extremely beautifuL!
Thanks for entering and good luck!
preets
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