Hey angel,
what are those scars on your arms,
and the mass invaded charms?
No more need for alarm.
Talk to me
I can hear it in your voice,
the pain, the hurt, the shame.
You never really had a choice,
the tears fall like rain,
it seems so insane,
it seems like a game.
Talk to me
Hey angel,
can you stay for a while?
Let me see that pretty smile.
There's no need to fly away,
everything will be OK.
Tomorrow's another day.
Talk to me
Hey angel,
don't you let them get you down,
you don't have play the clown,
anymore.
It's all enough to want to see heavens door.
You beg and plead "no more".
Talk to me
I can't take away your pain,
the scars, the hurt, the shame.
All I can do is be there for you,
hold your hand when you're feeling blue,
hold you high when you want to cry,
hold your wings out, so you can fly
again.
It's not the end.
Sweet dreams will come again.
Remove all the haze so you can see.
On that, you must believe.
Please,
talk to me
Author notes
"well behaved women rarely make history"
This song goes out to all the cutters, victims of rape and people who think no one is listening or cares. I care and would like to help in any way I can.
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A contest entry
- Fireflies still die when they hit the bug zapper by bdean2020.
560 points, ended May 23, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The anger and healing from abuse. by Se.
307 points, ended May 24, 2007, 26 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Song For Those Who Need It The Most by Drevin Revlocke.
375 points, ended June 22, 2007, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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Amazing. I Absolutely Love It!!
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That was an absolutely amazing piece of writing. I truly felt that you had me in mind when you were writing this. I only wish there were more people out there like you who understand with such passion. It was great I love it.
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I'm speechless. I loved it.
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Touching
I love this poem! If only more people could be this careing. Most people avoid, deny or ignore the suffering of others forceing us to suffer in silence. this poem brings light to those stuck in the darkness. It bring hope to the hopeless. I am deeply touched. I would love to hear the song! I think I would play it over and over!
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i love this poem!!!!! it's amazing
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Seriously felt like you were writing to me! It was a great write and so suppotive .. i loved it
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Excellent Writing
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this one deserves a gold it makes me want to cry
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Touching
Oh my gosh! I felt like you were talking right to me. I suffered an addiction where I would severly eraser burn myself. This poem was so beatiful and touching. It grabbed me and never let go. I can't tell you enough how powerful this was. I wish I could write as good as you!
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Beautiful, absolutely beautiful. I am sure you have helped a lot of people with kind words like this. Excellent work, you have a warmth in your words and passion that is so great. I can say from a survivor of abuse, that just a few thoughtful words can make a difference.
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nice
wow...i really enjoyed reading this piece...it felt like you were talking to me.
the warmth and hope in this poem is absolutely beautiful, and the imagery is astounding. it is absolutely wonderful. great, great job.
xx amy michelle
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wow...i really felt that you were talking to me in this... it made me feel happy and hopeful again
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this is amazing. it's really sweet, && very deep.
i think you are a great person for this.
it's awesome that you care about people that are/were abused by themselves or others.
great poem.
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this was reallt deep and sweet
its good you care about others who self-abuse and have been abused thats a very noble thing
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I loved that this was talking about an angel. You are one of my favorite poets on this site even though I have read only 2 of your poems. You have inspired me to write about angels. Thank You.
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Powerful
Damn...I love this poem, absolutely superb. a very powerful piece. keep it poppin.
Bless'd Be
Rai
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wow this is a really good poem.... i enjoyed it immensly... you certainly have a knack for making it believable and a good read...
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I loved it
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this is very nice poetry!i love how you put the words into a respectful piece of poetry!to tell you the truth i think this is one of the best poems here on allpoetry!well i have to go!always do your best and never give up!
sincerely,
sweetdancer (yasmine)
(ps:i love the picture!)
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Thank you for writing this..................my daughter is a cutter and it is very painfull to see the cuts on her arms and yet she tries to tell me a cat scratched hr or other off the wall stuff, she never wants to tell me that she is cutting herself because of her girlfriend mentally and physically abusing her,she finally opened up a few weeks ago about one of the times! She thinks I don't already know but I do! She was also raped when she was 15.........I was too! You have done a wonderful job on this piece.....keep up the great work!
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Unbelievably raw, yet compassionate. You must b someone's angel, too many judge first and don't ever ask questions. Self-harming isn't a sign of being crazy, it's more a primal scream for help and a physical outlet for inner pain, but u already know that, loved its reality.
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Kind of speechless right now. So many people don't care about those of us that cut and have been hurt in life. This shows taht some people stil do have hearts. Thank you, and congrats on all your trophies and praise.
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beautifully written words you have penned here for my contest....
theres only one problem .. it cant have already won a trophy before unless it was a honorable mention than that would be alright....
but it is in the rules... feel free to enter something else though.......nicely done!!!!!!!
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Thank you soooooo much for entering this great piece into my contest!!!!!!!!!
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wow.. i love your poem.. it truely spoke to me... i myself being a cutter.. and i have went threw some other hard stuff.. i love that you care enuff to reach out and try to help ppl.. good luck in the contest.. your have a true talent and a wonderful way with words...
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I can not express,
This poem leaves me feeling speechless. It is a poem that strikes me straight thru my chest. honestly i feel as tho i can feel the blood pouring thru my veins as i read each line. It is sad, and to a point i can almost feel your hope, and your inspiration. Keep writing you are very strong in your passion!
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wow, what a poem. this is truly one to touch the heart in many ways. it is clear that you have an understanding of what you are writing about here and you have a heart that reaches out to people on many levels. funny you should send this my way tonight as i am working on a poem about cutters myself. i never really thought about it until a year or so ago, things just got buried i guess but i was a bit of a cutter myself in my teen years, not to the extent or extreme that it seems to be these days with people but i have been there. what spurred what i am working on writing is a contest and when i saw the contest, i thought of my oldest son who will be 30. i didn't know it at the time but i found out probably 5 years ago or so that he was an extensive cutter, to the point that he actually carved the words "suffer forever" into his stomach and it covered his whole stomach from top to bottom, scars he still bears from his late teen years. funny how you never know these things are going on. since i found these things out, he has showed me the extent of his scars and they are all over his body, hence the reason quite probably that he is covered from neck to ankles in tattoos. both to cover the scars and as a release for more pain. anyways i have rambling here enough and i apologize for that. just wanted to thank you for being you and expressing the goodness of your heart in this write be well and be blessed my friend
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Beautiful
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Wow Dave,, I love it!!
This is a song..you should sell this!!
I can hear the foo fighters singing this in harmony, or maybe a band like elo.(?)....Bitchin!!
Love ya little brother! You are the best!
Jin
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Oh Wow
That was beautiful. Ugh this comment seems cheesy, but I'm still in such awe of your incredible poem. It's sad, and... I can feel my own heart aching. I'm really at a loss of words. Once again, beautiful.
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beautiful...
thank you. for this poem. i can relate to it completely as i am sure many other people [especially teens like me] out there can also. this poem is beautiful and it flow smoothly. it spoke to me in a powerful way. it's such an amazing feeling to know that someone out there understands and is listening....i am not the type of person who is good with asking for help, but if i ever need it again, i hope you don't mind if i come to you about it. thanks again for the wonderful poem, your words speak the TRUTH, and shout out to people others choose not to see. and thanks also for not judging those of us who have cut before or who have been in a situation like being raped or sexually assaulted.
<3
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Reading Again
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touching
my boyfriend mark said those same things to me when he found out i was cutting, so to read the raw emotion in this peice, really made me want to cry. no one i know or have read has ever written a peice like this, if you ever make a cd with this song on it, lemme know, i would love to buy it. brokenxlove420@yahoo.com
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that's pretty :]
i'm in no mood to dissect shit, besides, i don't think i could do that to this piece anyways.
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i've read this poem SO many times and i just had to come back and tell you a second time how much i like this...so...I REALLY like this. i'm a little sleep deprieved, forgive me...
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Nice write! The problem in many relationships is lack of communication. "Talk to me" very poetic. I can see you are a GIVER, I read this in your write. Good luck in the contest.
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Wow... I am the same way... not only do I care about these people, but I am one of them myself. Not only do I need help, but I have a need to help, if you catch my drift...
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wow.
This is amazing, man. Props.
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aww this is so sweet and sad. I love it a lot. you wrote it very beautifully. good work and thanks for entering my contest!
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What can I say.. its almost unbelievable the heart and raw emotion you have put in this. So often people shy away when difficult someone you care about is hurting over such horrible things. you totally deserve that and the applause. Awesome write with a nice melodic flow.
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I can see this one has been around the block a few times and winning all along the way! I enjoyed reading this. I particularly like the effectiveness of the repitition and the rhyme is right on! Wonderful verse! Thanks for sharing! Blessings and best wishes,
Frogz~
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yep i am seeing why this has won so many other trophies this is an incredible poem I enjoyed reading it because of the flow, repetition and rhyme, which emphasised the point. Great poem, good luck, Ampd
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this poem touched me...and as for ur authors note..well i am all of those...i havent cut in a while but even if i stay sober for the rest of my life it wont change the fact that i am a cutter..thats just who i am...and no one gets that
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Ooooh... so beautiful!! Definitely deserving of many trophies (congratulations on those). It really is an awesome poem and inspires me to write something like this, ya know? Okay, well, thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Take care.
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Beautiful. It really does flow like--haha, the first thing that comes to my mind is "Blood". This is a poem I could read again and again. Being a cutter, victim of sexual assult, and feeling like no one listens or cares, I can really connect to the peom. Thank you
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Excellent flow of rythm and rhyme. Your lyrics are smooth as silk and felt like a rhythmic dance in my mind as I read them...twice
Good luck in the contest and this was certainly my pleasure to read ~Tia
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This poem is truly amazing! The rhyme, and repition make this poem flow so well. I have never been through the situations represented in this poem but someone very near to my heart went through some tough times. Great job once again!
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Very well done. I've never been a fan of over-repetition, but in this one, "Talk to me" really does fit in well.
Hey angel,
what are those scars on your arms,
and the mass invaded charms?
No more need for alarm.
It's a wonderful beginning and all throughout the piece there is an obvious amount of emotion.
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This is the first poem that has ever made me cry. I could actually put myself here. I was diagnosed with bipolar, and yes I am a cutter and a victim of alot of things, but I am sitting here seeing this talent that you have. And I am thinking to myself, maybe one day...I can express myself as well as you did here so that others can see what you have just shown me.
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Special
This is so good and I can relate as well. For at one time in my childhood I was a rape victim. Not ashaimed now just want to reach out to those who have been there or is going through it. Keep on writing awesome writes and love the fact that you are willing to spread the word. 
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WOW!
i can identify with the sad angel with the scars on her arms...its so beatutiful that you want to rescue her...give her her wings again and tell her dont ever give up! -
good job! I love the rhyme in here... I believe it's a great poem for some of the cutters here, including myself, to read... I haven't done it in a long time, but either way, it is part of me... I love it. Keep it up!!!!
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Dude that is some intense stuff right there. I liked to have cried. You deserved the GOLD in those contest
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Amazing write with such feeling
So sad and profound with such deep sad emotions. It was beautifully expressed and beautifully written. A masterpiece write. Thank you for sharing (Lisa)
"All I can do is be there for you,
hold your hand when you're feeling blue,
hold you high when you want to cry,
hold your wings out, so you can fly
again.
It's not the end.
Sweet dreams will come to set you free.
Remove all the haze so you can see.
On that, you must believe."
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This was great.KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!
~Tia~
GOD BLESS
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Beautiful
This is truly touching. I love the way the words seem to flow so smoothly. The emotion expressed is wonderful; the caring and understanding offered and the request to "Talk to me."
I can't take away your pain,
the scars, the hurt, the shame.
All I can do is be there for you,
Those are my favorite lines. It's reality, no one can take away what has been done in the past, but by being there they help ease the suffering that the pain and memories cause. A beautiful write. Well Done and good luck in the contest.
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I hit the 2 on accident
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I hit the 2 on accident
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Wonderful
I was a rape victim 3 times my my foster parents and a neighbor!! And this is a very good poem I loved it It needs to be a song so more people will listen and hear the words and emotion inside of your poem I am glad there are people like you!!
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awsome write
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Wow, I like this alot, What a great job you've done! It sucks that people have to feel the way they do, but it's great that there are people like you to make them feel better! Great write. Oh, and if this isn't a song already, it really should be.
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This is beautiful and deeply touching. It goes with the image pretty well. I really enjoyed the repetition of 'talk to me'. For me, that is one of the most important things we can offer those who are in so much pain, the opportunity to open up and share the depths of their souls with us.
"I can't take away your pain,
the scars, the hurt, the shame."
It's true, very realistic, we cannot take away their pain, but, as you sum up right here..
'All I can do is be there for you,
hold your hand when you're feeling blue,
hold you high when you want to cry,
hold your wings out, so you can fly
again.
It's not the end.'
Again, very realistic and the least we can do for those who need us or are willing to reach out to us.
A powerful and poignant message rings loud and clear within your heartwarming lyrical rhyme. Nicely done. Thank you so much for this wonderful entry.
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i sent this poem to my bf,because thisis exactly how i feel about him.he's had a hard past.I love this poem its just so exspressive.. AMAZING!!!
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impresvie
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Seems this poem has entered a few contests congrad's on the tropy's!
I liked this line There's no need to fly away,
everything will be OK.
Tomorrow's another day.
great stanza! ~Sie
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Amazing
It was so emotional, and deep, its exactly how i feel.
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Hello! Just wanted to thank you for entering my very first contest! It has been slow to get off the ground, but fun none the less. I am going around now asking all of the finalists to make sure they have gone over all the rules and have followed them and since you are in fact a finalist I ask the same of you. The one rule that seems to be going un noticed is #3 where I've asked that contestants read at least two other entries and comment. If you have, great, if not I would ask that you do so soon. Contest closes in two days. I will be back at that time to leave my comment on your piece. Thank you so very much for entering and helping make this baby of mine a success.
SouFul
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WOW
this is really good I like in a lot.
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I really liked this song. I like the how you repeated some of the lines and I loved the message. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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bravo for penning this beautiful piece and for your brave and caring heart. I can relate to this on both sides, I am a survivor, not a victim! But I do understand what you mean! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e
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wow
this is a really good write. its nice to know that someone cares, sometimes thats all anyone can do. but knowing that can make such a big difference to someones life. great write, tc x
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Nice!
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this is awesome. to have someone to talk to can sometimes be the only thing to save a life. thank you for being one i can talk to. viyanna rosemarie
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incredibly done. so much in here and i know this so well.
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omg this is incredible. i love it. those are the kind of things i wish i had heard when i was this way. this is amazing.
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I can very much relate to this. You blew me away with this piece! I love it! This lyrics will touch many hearts.
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I love this. Someone that I am close to had all of that happen. Maybe I will send her the link to this. Thank you.
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How lovely an incentive this was. . Would make ME believe someone would catch my leap. . Nice Job. . .
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kinda reminds me of the Hinder song, Lips of an Angel, nice job!
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wow babe,
this is really good
great really
just remember (smile ur loved "hehehe")
but loved the poem...
*gina*
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really good
I love it keep writting and i'm added you as my favorite cant wait to read more
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so sweet!
i think it's sweet a little bit sad.. but i just loved it keep writing
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Very well written. I enjoyed reading this poem. Excellent job!
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Wow!!!
This is a really wonderful piece.
I know that there are a lot of cutters and people that feel ignored.
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Wow... I think this poem was beautiful, i liked the imagery of it all very nice and it flowed amazingly and really i loved it.
"All I can do is be there for you,
hold your hand when you're feeling blue,
hold you high when you want to cry,
hold your wings out, so you can fly
again.
It's not the end." I loved those lines. hey and can you tell me where you got that picture it's really beautiful. Great poem. Emily
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Master Piece
Wow what a perforance of a write. Love the story line. The words you used the details. The concern the heartfelt feeling of wanting to help. A fallen Angel. I had to read it twice. I will book marek this write with your permission. I love the last stances outstanding write. (Lisa)
"I can't take away your pain,
the scars, the hurt, the shame.
All I can do is be there for you,
hold your hand when you're feeling blue,
hold you high when you want to cry,
hold your wings out, so you can fly
again.
It's not the end.
Sweet dreams will come to set you free.
Remove all the haze so you can see.
On that, you must believe."
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This made me cry, but it's a wonderful poem....
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this is really good. i like it a lot.
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Very nice
I like this poem, thanks for the link
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This is really touching
Thanks for sending the link. I like the message behind the words and how it is laid out. Just one small itsy bitsy thingy...hehehe
hold your hand when your feeling blue, Better to say you are feeling blue or you're
Hugs and Blessings
Jan
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What a moving poem this is - and lovely of you to dedicate it to all the victims of cutting, rape, etc. You're obviously someone with a huge heart who cares deeply about people. This poem is littered with your concern and compassion and I love it!
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Brilliant
Thank you so much for this, am going through a very difficult tie and I have been crying all night.I've just woken up and yours is the first poem i have read.You made me feel better already,and now I know the sun will shine again.
Your poem carries a lot of emotion, and your wording is great.You reached out to me, and I felt every bit of it.
You have a great background too really appropriate.
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What a touching, compassionate poem, David. Your words are so sincere, almost makes me wish I was in trouble so you could say this to me.
Seriously, it's one of the most heartfelt, caring, poignant poems I've read. I hope that some of the people who it's meant for, read it. Your words could mean so much to them.
Did I see that this is a candidate for the allpoetry book project? It sure seems worthy to me, a perfect poem for troubled teens (or any teens)to read.
This is beautiful Good luck in the contest, too
Dee
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I really like it. I think it's a beautiful poem. It has such a wonderful voice behind it. Telling those who need it, people care....Again, beautiful piece, though me being me it may not account for much. I truly loved it. It reaches my list of one of the best I've read. Keep up the great work!
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Dynamic, Direct, Defined, Damm!
Emotional, beautiful, loving lyrics. This is truly a person reaching out to show love, caring, and a wonderfil offer of hope/help...excellent song material
darling can you sing? If so record this....please!
excellent writing....novy
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Awww, this is really great. Wonderful job!
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Awww, this is really great. Wonderful job!
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I am really glad I came accross this poem. I was taken advantage of (almost what you would call rape... I also cut... I've been trying to stop but am not doing so well... this actually gave me a little bit of hope and made me feel like someone out there actually cares. Thank you for writing this one. And also, just so you know, my favorite part was "All I can do is be there for you,
hold your hand when your feeling blue,
hold you high when you want to cry,
hold your wings out, so you can fly
again.
It's not the end." It shows that no matter how much you try, you're not a mirical worker. Keep writing! I loved it!
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