the grass marched
the way of the wind
towards the edge of the forest
where tall spruce
fall
die
and make the ground
as rich as cemetery soil
A contest entry
- Quick Pre-write Contest by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended July 9, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A new poetry magazine ...
is looking for short poems.
http://www.freewebs.com/black_and_white_bacelite_cowboy/submission.htm
Seems to me that this one would be perfect from what I've seen of this site.
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The imagry is amazing. That last line had this odd beauty that is hard to explain. It is lovely and short, but very effective. Also, your title is really awesome.
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this seems to fit somehow with thoughts that have been swimming in my head in an odd way that I can't begin to explain... interesting how we stumble on these things sometimes
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Oooh very cool imagery and feelings inspired by the last line. "cemetery" soil is the last kind of soil I would've expected to see, lol, so I always like getting hit by a little surprise. Short write, but powerful. Thank you for entering my contest.
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this is good, very ...
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very well done
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lovely
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Ah, what a refreshing change in writing styles. I think Tyler did a great job of picking people with different ways of telling things, so it doesn't get better judging than this. I felt that you explained so much in so few words, and that your details were just right for the length you used. Great job.
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Maybe if you used Punctuation or capitized some of this, but again, no... I am afraid that won't even help this. needs a ton of Snappy! Nothing original. and frankly this just is not any good at all.
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oh, and the title? has gotta go!
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i found this to be very very ho hum, anything can spice this up! you are not actually serious r u!
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I love it. This is so far my favorite piece of the competition. It is short with beautiful wording to make stunning images. Simply put I think you will score very high.
Wonderful title as well, very fitting of the past week for me personally.
Good luck this season,
-S
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as rich as cemetary soil
great line. you used so many metaphors.. all of them were stunning. this is beautiful, really. great job. -
your style is so different from the others.
You write poems with such simplicity yet holds depth and is complex.
I felt this could have had just at least a few more lines, and in those lines you could have added more imagery which i felt this lacked.
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superb piece... sober, solemn, yet the hints of newness from the pine and spruce... the clearing of land making way for death and for life
a clever piece this Kendall.. very good .. thought provoking
. Rewarded 4
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Quite a piece of imagery, you have here. Solemn and beautiful in all its sadness. A truly wonderful job.
. Rewarded 4
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