Anticipation...
A dream of perfect peace
Always within Gods reach
Afternoons in summer
Ablaze with heavens blooms
Abundant streams and hills
An old worldly cottage
Awaits my coming home
Author notes
Pleiades Form - Title 1 word, 7 lines, 6 syllables per line.
Picture credit...Jim Warren
A contest entry
- Pleiades Picture Competition V by ShelleyA.
525 points, ended May 19, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You paint a beautiful picture with these images. I can imagine myself in this place. I also like how you altered the picture.
Congrats on your silver trophy!
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Difficult form to master
But I think you did it
This was so beautiful, you got a longing feel across and the beautiful scene was set in perfect grace
It was expertly done to fit with the form
It's so beautiful
well done in the contest
All my love, my gifted mother
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Very good. It has a nice rythym to it. I liked it. Kudos!
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A really delightful and enchanting read ... congrats on the silver. x
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Nice title. Perfect form. Lovely imagery, flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Nice descriptives. Good word choice. Nice alliteration. I can relate to the feeling of anticipation of reaching this home. Your poem fits the picture for which it was written. Thank you for your entry. Shelley
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