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The little knight tales

The little knight came by to his princess
tried to bring her peace
by all the possible wait he know
by everything he thought.

She told him his heart was taken
by another little soldier
who has come before him.

Now the little knight, goes back
but the princess yell him "i love you too"
He continue his way, but this time sadness as disappear
and has been replaced my a huge smile

then the night come, and the little knight went to sleep
but he could sleep, since those word of the little princess
were hauting him.

Then the more the day were passing,
the more he though about her
of her hair, her eyes, her body
the way she talked and the way she act.

Soon enough he didn't wanted to sleep
he didn't want to eat
he didn't wanted to live far away from her
but he know to both of there way will
get separated from each other
even if he didn't like it.

The he though, "what if i try to keep us together"
"what if i try to create a paradise for"

And now he is working toward that only goal,
so even if he was unhappy, sad or even dead,
she will always be happy.

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  • FallenxAngelxMisfit
    October 16, 2007

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    thats really sad and happy kinda poem if that made any sense but i really like it trying ot make someone happy even though u wont is a great thing in a preson


  • the-gifted
    May 30, 2007
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    awww this is really good. i enjoyed reading it. it is very cute.


  • MerelyMadness
    May 22, 2007

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    Gotta go with blood filled cereal over there. The gramatical errors are my only problem with the piece. The subject is wonderful and moderately original. A good write in any case and best of luck in the contest.


  • Procrastination
    May 22, 2007
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    This poem is very different. Good imaginative write.
    Goodluck in the contest.
    Emily x


  • La mente ha confuso
    May 22, 2007

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    I like this piece, but the gramatical errors made it a little tough to read. None-the-less this was very interesting. Good job.


  • blondone
    May 21, 2007
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    Like the poem but this contest was for trophy pick up only for the three people named... sorry


  • intanglio2ring
    May 21, 2007

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    a paradise for a princess

    A wonderful tale creating a paradise.
    It's a shame that all good deeds don't always work out as we wish!
    Thanks for your entry & Good Luck in my contest!
    Tang


  • fallenangel671
    May 18, 2007

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    nice poem. i loved the emotion in it.
    my favorite part would have to be
    She told him his heart was taken
    by another little soldier
    who has come before him.
    this was a lovely piece and i enjoyed it,
    keep writing


    ~Ashley~<3

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