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Gypsy, Play Your Violin

 

Let your lament to the moon begin

Gypsy play your violin

Eyes that shine in a moonlit haze

A darkened yet enchanted gaze

The fortune teller weaves his tale

A story that will never fail

A potion to enchant the heart

A spell so lovers never part

..

 

He became a gypsy rover

Took her to the land of clover

Took her to the hills abound

There was so much love around

The trees whispered softly an irish tune

That summoned the dark side of the moon

Carressed now in their magickal hands

Forest creatures began their dance

..

 

The music filled the scented air

They danced enchanted with such flair

He took her to a mountain high

Almost as if they could fly

"I am no gypsy" Then said he

"I am a rich man, come and see"

I own the lands here all around

Leave ye not this love we've found

..

 

I stay forever here with you

Love is fair and love is true

I loved the gypsy but I love you

Tell me what else should I do

A lord ye may be but a gypsy to me

As I look you are who I see

Let your gentle music begin

Gypsy play your violin

 

 

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  • imemotionalnotemo
    July 19

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    wow this gives me a great image.you captured every moment so perfect wow


  • individuality gold member
    July 10

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    i have this urge now to start dancing about, i might even throw some supertramp on and have a listen to some music, to get my blood going inside of me - a good poem

  • Aries gold member
    July 1

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    Wonderful

    I absolutely love this poem I have such wonderful images in my mind's eye I can almost hear the violin play


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    January 18

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    This is so well done, I could hear the music playing and my heart went to swaying, Superb pen!

    Let the ink flow!
    many blessings, Sandi


  • suseann
    January 14

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    This weaves a tale of wished upon fantasy so very well. I see this author's playful side of enjoyment in roll playing. This inclination creates new vistas for reading enjoyment.Thank you for sharingSmile

  • Jim
    October 8, 2008
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    I don't believe up until now I've read any of your poetry.

    I'm glad to see it's exceptional.


  • Lowell Poe
    July 25, 2008

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    STUNNING .

    This really transported me.
    It was written so professionally with well placed words and feeling.
    It is done with magic and lust and sentiment...
    all the spirits that roam inside a gypsy's heart.
    I could imagine your surprise at the coincident of the endearing name, before I even read this piece.
    And I'm so glad I did,
    It makes your comments on my work all the more valued knowing what an exquisite writer you are.
    I will know doubt read more.

    Blessings Gypsy,
    LOWELL


  • frownsnfreckles
    May 12, 2008

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    oh I do like this, the gipsy boy of Irish romanticism. My love was once a gipsy boy (unfortunately he didn't own any land but his humor was priceless lol)


  • jackysunshine
    February 29, 2008
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    Brillient

    Lovely story told in your poem.I really enjoyed reading it.


  • Oleander
    February 22, 2008
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    This is truly beautiful.


  • z etoile
    February 19, 2008
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    Oh this is awesome it should have won the gold!


  • Oktobere Sahnge
    November 30, 2007

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    *sigh*

    My heart melted down between my toes. I'm a gypsy at heart, and I feel the rythem throb into my soul. This makes me want to dance....

    Lys, Empress of Pandas


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    November 17, 2007

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    wow, I really like this one! This has wonderful flow and imagery throughout. The first two lines are awesome, they immediately set me up for a wonderful ride as I read the remainder of this piece. A thoroughly enjoyable read. Very well done.
    Rory


  • Tarja
    October 15, 2007

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    First, congrats on the honorable mention trophy. I was really impressed with this. Nicely done. I had a beautiful image in my head as I read this... the detail was so vivid. Great piece. Very exotic and original.


  • Khadidja the Wise
    October 2, 2007

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    It is really romantic, but somehow it has this dark flair to it. I like the way music is a main theme in all the verses. It somehow connects the whole poem more.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 6, 2007

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    WONDERFUL WRITING

    I LOVE IT. WONDERFUL RHYME AND WONDERFUL FLOW SHIRL. THE IMAGERY IS OUTSTANDING. IT IS SO EASY TO READ AND HAS A CERTAIN BEAT TO IT. THAT GYPSY MUST HAVE BEEN SOMETHING. WELL DONE SHIRL. ANOTHER BRILLIANT ONE.

    WAYNE

  • ea silver member
    May 20, 2007

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    This is very lyrical -- I can hear this being sung to the tune of the gypsy's violin. I would just suggest "Took her where the hills abound". Good luck in the contest.


  • PerVirtuous
    May 19, 2007
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    Musical and sweet. Three bunnies!!


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    May 18, 2007
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    I loved the imagery so much.


  • grannyeri gold member
    May 18, 2007

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    Thought these lines just flowed so well, and the story such a lovely one. Kind of like a fairy tale with the happily ever after ending. Liked the rhythm and rhyme, and the wonderful ending.

  • Mercury Rising
    May 18, 2007

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    Excellent

    A really entrancing and romantic tale of Romany Ryes and their crying violins. Quite the enchanting pleasure to read. Thanks so much for entering my contest. Best of luck.

    David


  • delightfulmess silver member
    May 18, 2007

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    I liked this poem a lot. I love rhyme when it is done just right, and this was right! I like how it transported me, a mystical land of love. Excellent.
    I it


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 18, 2007

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    ohhhhhh

    I loved I loved I loved I loved.
    Simply PERFECT. A splendid entry. ~Pamela

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