Heavenly home along
Hills gently rolling as
Here we find our way to
Hold a touch of beauty
Having left cares behind
Hoping to stay within
Haven of Nature's bliss
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Author notes
Pleiades Form, photo inspired.
{Pleiades Form - Title 1 word, 7 lines, 6 syllables per line.
first letter of the tittle is the first in every line.}
still working on this form...
A contest entry
- Pleiades Picture Competition V by ShelleyA.
525 points, ended May 19, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the repetition of 'h'
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Beautiful Work!
I love the serenity of this. It reminds me of a place where both my parents are now and also of Ireland a bit.
Love you! ((((mimoo)))) (((acqua))))
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Wonderful
Very well done. And so creative. Congrats on the Hon Mention.
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I wasn't sure if I came to this post before, but I notice by the BIG BANNER posted to my last comments it seems I have.
I don't know what "remote linking" is, much less how I did it...But if you want to delete the previous comment, Acqua, feel free. If I can find that cabin image again, I'll pass it along.
Jo -
A beautiful pleaiades~ This is a wonderful form and you have written a delightful one. Your lines flow delicately and smoothly together. Lovely images it creates making for a beautiful read.
Thanks for sharing~
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Only to add in the way of P.S.: I didn't realize it was a picture-contest inspiration write, but the contest image was a summer scene and this is a close-up winter scene as I envisioned it!
Jo -
This is the scene of a quiet cabin home that this poem brought to mind for me:
Lovely poem, Acqua and CONGRATULATIONS on the HM too!Jo
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This is really awesome. Great flow and purpose.
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Just lovely, Acqua. I took a peek at the picture. This poem captures the essence of the picture well.
"Hoping to stay within
Haven of Nature's bliss"
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You are so good writing those short poems, they always come with a gentle rhythm and soft images, no matter what the subject is. Lovely verse sweet Mi
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paints a great picture in the reader's mind
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Hoping to stay within
Haven of Nature's bliss...
Just beautiful, I love this one, so serene and such a calm and cozy feel to this, I like what you saw in the picture
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Wonderful interpretation of this picture used to serve as inspiration in this contest. Liked the flow and the images one gets from this. Way to go in receiving HM.
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Enchanting!
This leaves me feeling so calm and serene- wonderful imagery that unfolds ever so effectively-'Haven of Nature's bliss'- how enchanting can this be
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I think I tried one of these once...you notice I said tried.
Honorable mention, cool! You're racking up the green trophies. I like green.
it's a beautiful tour, that is what it feels like, though of course the message is more into preserving that beauty and tranquility.
When younger I'd roam the woods and I so know that feeling you describe.
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Lovely title. Perfect form. Very good flow and tone. Nice imagery. Lovely depth of feeling. Very good word choice. Good alliteration. Nice assonance. You took us on a lovely journey with this piece. Your poem fits the picture for which it was written. Thank you for your entry. Shelley
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There is a peace in the countryside which is difficult to find in the city: "Having left cares behind".
Your form is accurate in my eye, and your images bring me memories of driving with my family as a young child.
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Oh, this is a beautiful pleiades! You have written a lovely poem, it is so sweet. It flows wonderfully, and you had a wonderful word choice for the beginning of each line. Good luck in the contest!
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