looking through all the stained glass windows
all the pain the misery trapped
lost in what can not be found
no image, just darkness
seeing is no longer believing
the past showed sight is on top
the hurt that caused this splitting
can not seem to be fought
this battle is never ending
this blood is always seaping
spreading through hearts and souls
and blinding all the tension
theres no where to go
no belonging
only white, nothingness
and even though sight is belief
all truth has been lost
A contest entry
- You by Sofia Nadia.
800 points, ended May 31, 2007, 14 entries
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Comments
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eerie...
but i like it. you had a few mispellings: 'can not' should be 'cannot', 'seaping' should be 'seeping'. and some of the grammar was a little off (i didn't understand the line about 'past showed sight') but overall, good job. you followed my rules and used great imagery and your message and tone was beautiful. thanks so much for entering!!
~SofiNadi -
That is amazing
Well done that gave me a chill at the end.
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