Verse 1:
The soles of my shoes have worn down
There's nothing 'tween my feet and the ground
I'll wander the world 'til the end
And I'll never find closer friends
Chorus:
It's about love
It's about caring for one another
It's about love
When it feels like I'm among my brothers
It's about time
It's about telling her how much I missed her
It's about time
They're more than friends, they are my sisters
It's about life
Verse 2:
You're there through the good and the bad
When I only want to get mad
And you'll always be in my heart
Our spirits will never depart
Bridge:
Hineh mah tov umah naim
Shevet achim gam yachad
Hineh mah tov umah naim
Shevet achot gam yachad
How wonderful it is to be together
So please remember...
(CHORUS)
Final Verse:
You're there for me when I am down
They lift me right up off the ground
Don't know what's 'round the next river bend
But I'll always be among friends
They're there for me through all the strife
Now I've come to know...
It's about life
Author notes
This song is probably the most meaningful, personal thing I've ever written. The only other that comes close is my song,"In the Land of Women". This one's even better because I actually wrote the melody myself. This is NOT a rock song in any sense of the word. Think more along the lines of acoustic guitar and/or piano with light percussion(i.e bongos)
P.S. The bridge is an excerpt from Jewish liturgy:
Hineh mah tov u-mah na-im
Shevet achim gam yachad
It means, "Behold how good and fitting it is when brothers dwell together in unity."
P.P.S. "Na-im" is pronounced "nah-eem", although it usually comes out more like "nah-yeem". Some people sing "achot", sisters, instead of "achim", or alternate the two as I did.
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ehh... so i just reallized that i wrote this whole critique for an entry in a contest that's not mine (i clicked 'next in contest' for the wrong contest in the last entry i read)
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this is very powerful and very good. There wasn't a single snag in the flow of the lyrics or a single word that wouldn't translate well into song. I was thinking along the lines of a solo piano song and i see that your author's notes agrees. I liked the fact that the subject matter was so personal; intimacy with the author breeds originality. My one complaint is that you sabotage this originality somewhat. It seems as if there are many great stories behind this song that have created the connection that you have with these "sisters" but you don't share with the reader. It's as if you're looking at everything after the fact, instead of forcing the listener to suffer some of the experiences. The only thing (in my opinion, i'm certainly not an expert) keeping this very good song from being a GREAT song is that you tell the listener how much these friends mean to you (and you do a great job of this) instead of having the listener live the story and feel this sistership for themselves.
I don't mean to put down your writing in any way, i liked it very much, this is just my opinion of how it could be improved a bit.
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Very nice, like the Hebrew bridge. I know that verse from the Bible. Nice song. and it is meaningful
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This is a very nice song. Thank you for entering it in my contest, and good luck.
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Beautiful
This is wonderful, full of meaning, emotion, and depth. I could almost hear it playing in my head. Wonderful job! Thank you for sharing this beautiful song. A very lovely piece! -
I like your song. Nice use of a bridge, it adds interest. The first verse is the best.
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this is awsome it sounds so cheer ful i can hear it in my head brilliant keep it up.
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I like it but it makes me sad. My friends arent good so it sucks to see others rejoice over it..haha
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hi i thought this was very good loved the layout and the flow also loved the style and the imagery thank you for enterinhg and good luck
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I liked it. It was a bit confusing at the bridge...I had no idea what you were talking about. I only know french...and english of course. Great job. good luck.
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Wow, I really like this song. I could feel the emotion in it, and the bond that you described between siblings is a bond that should be cherished.
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great, it was simply great and powerfull ^^
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This was very good. Lyrical indeed and well written. Very good work, Thank you for entering my contest and good luck, K
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Yeah I can see how it would seem that way to an outsider's point of view, especially with cut off words like "'til" and "'tween", but the melody I worked out isn't country either.
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Yea. I knew that part wasn't english. lol. Overall, it was okay. I love the meaning of friendship in this write. It sorta seemed country but i couldn't quite figure it out. Definitely not rock, i know.
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