In your cage you fly
under lock you cry
as your eyes talk
your heart walks
wispers on fears
bring your heart near
No~ lesson learned
you crash an burn
untill the next turn
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- The Sky's the Limit by Dead Fishies.
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Sounds like someone in a bad marriage. Your commitment keeps you form leaving, bound with the ring on your finger. The flesh is faithful but not the heart. Enjoyed.
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Yes, I feel your words. It is a short and profound piece. Your title goes well with the poem. I like the opening two lines most:
"In your cage you fly
under lock you cry"
Very very nice work, honestly -
this is the TWA flight coordinator...yer FLIGHT was jus cancelled due to delay of crashing on the runway lol...the next available flight is being taxied onto the curb now...oh wait thats jus a paper airplane with a suicide note writ on it lol...
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I've felt that way before. It is so true. Good use of rhyming. I loved it. Keep up the good work. thanks and good luck.
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Deep stuff
I like it, ltad. You make me think of an image of a person who is tied down, not able to express, but who yearns to do so. Almost like a prisoner.
et.al., as haiku
Not a free moment
Caught up and put behind bars
With free emotions
poet
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very good
some times i would like to be in a locked cage with a sheet pulled over the top then being a stupid bird i would just sleep all day and night ah sweet rest great write...
love the papa
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