Down this trail I've walked before
I hang my head in shame.
How did I end up here again
I have myself to blame.
I know where this trail leads
And yet I proceed.
Temptation has taken over
Its planted its seed.
I make sure no one is looking,
Then I stick the needle deep.
I see something in the shadows
My sister starts to weep.
"I didn't see you." I said
Tears stream from her eyes.
"You said you wouldn't," she screams
And I knew she was right.
"I always wanted to be like you," she sobs
"But now, now I see
The damage you are doing to yourself
The damage you are doing to me."
I've let down my little sister
Her respect for me is now gone.
All for a needle and a handful of pot
What the hell have I done?
She's the one I care for
And I make her suffer all the same.
Life isn't something you can play with
Life is no game.
I'm glad to report that that was years ago
You see I am now clean.
My sister is once again proud of me
I've closed that door definitely.
Author notes
This is again dealing with drug issues that my friend is going through. I just want it to end up how this did. This is all I can write about for a while.
A contest entry
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I love that...seriously...its awesome....I have always liked poems about things like this
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Great Write. It is always hard for family members and friends to watch someone they love struggle with addiction.
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wow, this was beautiful and I can relate too it...I have been through/going through, the same thing at the moment. except it is me that is harming the others for I am the one who is the drug addict. this spoke to my heart and I am glad I came across this. Great write the rhyme was perfect
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oh my god this poem was great i really love this i just wish my older brother could be like you...good luck
~Wolf~ -
great write... what option?? rhyme is a little off but besides that its all good
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great write! I really enjoyed reading this piece!!! Thank you so much for entering!! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
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Very nice, but I don't think this will win, so I'm going to remove this from the contest. [I have 100 entries.. it's easier to stay organized by doing this] Thanks for entering though.
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Awesome
Well this is great writing you have done here. You have told us a story of a young woman who is using drug and her struggle to break free. Thanks for an awesome read and keep on writing. the last stanza I love the most.
I'm glad to report that that was years ago
You see I am now clean.
My sister is once again proud of me
I've closed that door definitely.
It give the story a perected ending
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an amazing write.
love it.
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This really touched me. I read your author notes too....I hope everything turns out okay.
You did a wonderful job writing this...the ending gave way to hope.
Thank you for entering and Good Luck!
debbie
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Mind Blowing
Written very well.....You wrote it as so the reader could feel the pain and sorrows that you felt as you went through them very original.....
Great Write....
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this was a great write..i enjoyed reading this and can really relate to this write..i have been a drug addict and understand the pain she is suffering and is trying to escape from..and once you become an addict you are never free..tempation is alwats there and you are bound to slip..you just gottta remember to get yourself back a second time..if you ever need to talk send me an im or e-mail me my e-mail and msn are on mu author page keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
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Great message and I hope it does end up this way. Very well written. Thanks for this entry and good luck.
Jeannie
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Sad, Great message!
This is really good. You've an amazing amount of wisdom for one so young and a firm grasp of the harsh realities of life. I hope that your friend's older sibling will pull through his addiction or vices. Wonderfully written.
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Awesome. Once more you have done a great job with this poem. Thanks Ale for the read and keep on writing
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omg ale.
i love this.
its so fucking sad.
he quit?! or youre just trying to be optimistic?
really though, this hitz home. has she read any of these poems?
it makes me wanna fucking cry 4 her.
cuz he was always a kool guy and to have to see your brother go thru something like that...esp w/all the other shit. big hugz 4 aly.
:'(
anyway, nice write.
spect-ac-u-lar. <--thatz my new word.
luv ya lotz
~Morgan
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Morgan....
Hey. No he hasn't quit. I just wish it would end up like this. Cause I know he's gonna look back on his life and see how stupid it all is. Ruthanne and Aly love him so much. He's disappointing a lot of people. I don't think it's as bad as before. It's got a bit better.
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