I'm all ears now spill, no shame
it's not your fault
that I'm in love
with him
''He's not here, at least he said he
thought so, he still isn't sure, but wow
so typical of you, being obvious like that
we spent hours talking about nothing,''
sounds great, lucky you
maybe I should try to talk to him?
''Let him come around, he will, eventually
of course, that's if he doesn't run away,''
you think he will? oh I hope not
I've been waiting for years
I don't want to waste them away
no something that'll burn me to ashes
''Poetic lines, pulling out the desperate signs?
He won't be able to see the sun shine,
let him go, if you love him, you will,''
[who does she think she is?]
You're right, I'm sorry I even bother
I guess he was way out of my league
''You don't have a league honey,''
you hit the spot, you're so clever
maybe if I'd take the time to be more like you
just maybe he'd might consider me as a friend
but that's just maybe and I'm tired
of wasting my time on maybe.
It's time to waste my time on actions.
A contest entry
- The Sky's the Limit by Dead Fishies.
600 points, ended May 23, 2007, 18 entries
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Comments
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Scumshine, stop and check it out. Then pursue it or let it go.
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You are not wasting your time. If this is true, do what your heart tells you is right. Great job. I loved the dialogue. Good luck.
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RAWIRIGNNGK. =]
That is like my replacement of the cheese face on INO.
I loved it. Absolutely oved it.
The diologue was really well integrated I thought.
And the tone, the way you shortened the lines in the first stanza, reay biting.
It reminds me of a poem I wrote once actually.
Great job Teresa <3
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