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the Postlude



What are you going to do, dear friend,
The rest of your life?
Your beloved wife
Seated by your side
Darns with devotion
And skips a stitch or two often in her design
Never forgetting to peck at you
With a needlepoint fine
Picking up the times
When you were damnably wrong
Which she now conscientiously condemns
And will condemn all your life.
Your darling child
Repeatedly reminds
You have outlived your time.
All of them judge you according to their lights
But how do you judge yourself
Now that the summit has been gained
Does the struggle seem worthwhile?
In the dying light
Going the downhill of your life
Do you sadly repine
All your priorities have been wrong?
Did you chase only a mirage
Ignoring things dearest to your heart
Put off for another time?

This height
Cost you a lot of opportunities
Worse still, some compromise.
My heart
Now it is too late in the day
To re-align.
Let us have some rest
The rest of our life
To amuse ourselves to see
How life eludes life.
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  • davelolione gold member
    October 8

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    Lets all grow old disgracfully!

    A nice write and it seems some questions of life that still needs to be lived? Priorities will tak care of themselves.
    I nice write that I thouroughly enjoyed.
    I was thinking of 'Under Milkwood' whenI read about the needlepoint. I've just been listening to it again, sorry!

    good luck and thanks for entering the competition.

    Dave


  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    March 20
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    You write about "Going the downhill of your life" yet I am still climbing it. I can say from experience that you can still have many new and wonderful things to come. The doctors have "re-aligned" my heart and I am going to use it.
    Don't "just rest". Join me
    Jim

    • karabi
      March 21
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      I-Like-Rhymes

      Never mind, it is ok.

    • karabi
      March 20
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      I-Like-Rhymes

      You must be a great guy who thinks he is going up when he is actually going down. It seems you are suffering from what psychiatrists call 'staircase hallucination'. You are only 55 and you have already re-aligned your heart! I am nearing 70 yet by God's grace I am yet to re-align anything. And my 'young' friend here re-align does not mean either replacement or repair of your body parts but re-orienting your attitude and outlooks on life. Do whatever you like but let me enjoy my cricket and football with my grand children. Are you thinking about your weekly visit to your doctor? Now I am going for a two hours long walk.

      • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
        March 21
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        Ouch!
        Actually I am going (and growing) up, changing from the ass I used to be into, hopefully, something better. I was an aloof loner who has now re-oriented his outlook.
        I can only applaud the life your comment describes. I obviously misinterpreted your poem, particularly these lines
        "Now it is too late in the day
        To re-align.
        Let us have some rest"
        Sorry!
        Jim


  • HopelessScribbles gold member
    March 20

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    sad, to a point, but yet life is better over 50 ,as your able to see the other side that consisted of immature thoughts, thank you for this entry
    good luck
    mm


  • Nicada silver member
    February 11

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    This is quite a deep and thought provoking poem here. You did a very nice job on this, and I thank you so much for entering. Blessings, Patty


  • LunaAmara
    December 19, 2008

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    i love that you stir my thoughts while i read this. there's so many interpretations and things to consider.
    this is great!
    gl


  • lindaburns gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    JUDGE:

    Thank you for entering my contest. You ask some questions here that will find their way to many a mind as man reaches his “golden” years. “Life eludes life”. Not for most of us – let us hope.


  • usually-untitled
    September 22, 2008
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    the joys of aging.
    interesting write.
    thanks for entering!


  • echo-ink
    August 5, 2008

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    Good write, good luck in the contest, yessa!

    I like that you brought out the regret we harbour, and i liked the lines: did you chase only a mirage, ignoring things dearest to your heart? thanks for entering. PL


  • XHollowXEyesX
    July 31, 2008

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    wow this is a very thought-provoking piece of writing. Depending on the readers life/past depends on how they interpret the meaning, awesome. love the emotions portrayed.
    Thanks for entering
    All the best
    ~Hollow~


  • Lady Michaella
    July 13, 2008
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    Thanks for entering! I feel emotion in this.


  • Christina-is-crazy
    June 18, 2008

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    This is a really great poem,
    keep up the good work,
    Thank you for entering the contest.
    And good luck
    ♥ christina


  • Christina-is-crazy
    June 18, 2008
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    Graet peom, thanks for entering my contest. good luck, ♥ Christina

  • OurxBeginning
    June 6, 2008

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    This is a thought provoking piece. For me it is atleast. It's very true and I agree with your last line. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • leander Moderators member
    January 6, 2008

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    There are some very interesting lines in this poem here you've done a good job again!
    thanks for this entry as well!
    Leander


  • Game Master
    June 23, 2007

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    That was a great poem, I like the ending when it says "How life eludes life" that was a great ending.


  • Twins 4 me
    June 1, 2007
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    This is a great write. You have amazing talent. Thanks so much for sharing this!


  • Dead Fishies
    May 23, 2007
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    This was beautiful, and it flowed very nicely. Great job.

    • karabi
      May 23, 2007
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      Glad to know you liked it. Thanks a lot.

  • karabi
    May 22, 2007
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    The test of honesty is the tenacity with which we are able to stick to our chosen ideals and aspirations in life against odds, though others, even our near and dear ones, may not agree with us. And to achieve anything worthwhile in life may involve making sacrifices. Thanks for reading and commenting.


  • grannyeri gold member
    May 21, 2007
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    Makes one think of their life and if they are giving up little things, the main things in their life, for that which they think is more important. Is one married to their job, is one never home, always on the road, leaving wife and children on their own too much? Do we have regrets we need to make amends for now? Liked the flow and the message this poem shares.

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