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Shake My Hand

I knew you before.
In fact,
many times we passed in the crowds.
Usually, you were with older people,
seniors, if you will.
Occassionally, you embraced children,
innocents on this journey.
But, at no time,
were you ever alone.
Could not see your face,
always just far enough away to be blurred.
Not that you were ever shy,
No,
by no means let me imply this.
Your excrementiuos breath,
anything but timid.

I just thought I would be older,
but, you always need friends.
My surity with life always so clear,
now,
my state ambiguous at best.
The death-watch clicks it's wings-
preparation for the execution of my immortality.
Although the semen of life grows to maturity,
it is also the semen of death.
These, the same seeds,
harvested during different seasons-
my time for the grist.

There is no seduction from purity here.
Last vestiges of purity long gone.
Although this sepsis consumes the physical,
my spirituality survives the reaper.
Therefore, bring on your rigor mortis my friend.
Use your scythe or halbred.
Srike your final blow.
I have no misunderstanding as to your motives.
No fear,
only resignation and wonderment.
Release these yearning questions.
Allow them the freedom to explore life,
Once you shake my hand.

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  • mamad gold member
    May 24, 2007

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    The treatment of the subject is very well done. I do think that lines 21-30 could be cut without damaging the poem and perhaps bring a terseness. I do like this piece.

    • Chris Stienstra
      June 25, 2007
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      Hello again.

      Sorry for the delay. Work has been rather hectic the past few weeks. Thank yo for your comments. I appreciate the feedback.I see what you mean regarding lines 21-30. Hope all is well with you.
      Chris