Was it your kiss that waked the slumbering sea
Touching the cold water
Staining a blush of pink upon the grey
I loved you then in the gentle light of day~
And you were there in the sun-kissed waves
Glittering and rippling on the sparkling sand
Dancing over the wind-tossed sea
With morning dreams of life, love, and immortality~
At noon when the passions raged
In the howling winds and crashing waves
Churning up until we could take no more
Flinging us down on a rock-strewn shore~
In the golden light of afternoon when shadows fall
And colors too bright to comprehend
Whirls the clouds across the skies
Swiftly the sun is gone
And day subsides~
I will love you when the moon hangs silent
Over the restless wine-dark sea
Where a golden sunset shimmers and shines
Lighting a path of love
From here to eternity~
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Written July 29th, 2003
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beautiful and erotic...two of my favorite things.Very nicely written and the art goes with the poem perfectly.Great job...of course.Blessed be
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Beautiful
Wow....!! A Beautiful poem filled with gentle waves and sensual currents that takes the reader into the depths of the sea...down to the seabed! Loved it - and the picture too - Jim Warren is one of my favourite artists and I've used quite a lot of his paintings on my poem page at PostPoems. Beautiful poem that indulges all the senses!!
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Amazing
Hey Susan this is really good. I can get really clear visualization to the entire thing. I could see it as if it was a movie. Your are very talented with poetry. I am hope you keep writing. -
amazing!
Brilliant imagery, amazing! -
wondrous.
This poem is very very good. It incorporates all my favorite things. It's beautiful. -
Heady stuff...so passionate and so beautiful...as always I am impressed by your talent and words Susan...and the picture is really beautiful as well...I am once again, charmed...hugs, Ro
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An amazing piece as always I loved that pasrt so much:
"At noon when the passions raged
In the howling winds and crashing waves
Churning up until we could take no more
Flinging us down on a rock-strewn shore"
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oustandingly beautiful, enough of a wistful tone to keep it from being too sugary/sentimental. Sea romances are often wild and passionate, guess it is the influence of the sea - you do it justice - would like you to reconsider the last stanza. I think you can enhance it's force into a stunning mind-blow. You've certainly got the talent!
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One word... beautiful
~Kathy -
ohhh, the imagery in this was really amazing susan! wow, how is it you can pull off that much imagery
this was very sensual, and i liked it, it was nice and relaxing and calm and all those little things together very nice poem and picture
kayla* -
I love your impression on this photo...you did an amazing and stunning job expressing, with so much clarity and descriptive detail...your poem and the picture just go so well together.. absolutely brilliant write Susan!!!!!
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Oh and i forgot to tell you how much i LOVE that picture, its so sensual, romantic and sexy. The picture definately fits the poem well, i dont know where you found it but you couldnt of picked a better picture....Good one sweets.
Lynn -
This was quite lovely Susan. The word choice, structure and overall imagery were wonderful. As for the picture you chose to help illustrate this piece- quite the image
btw... You also did a great job updating your top/bio. page with your new picture. It came out great!
Kimmie -
The words seem to embrace a question with no answer, of an emotion complex and deep. Felt on a level beyond ..in colors seen or love felt, yet expressed only through the verse of the poet....
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This is super! I love the images this conjures up. Great flow.
CT -
I am speechless, i cant describe how remarkable this piece is. I loved the lines:
I will love you when the moon hangs silent
Over the restless wine-dark sea
Where a golden sunset shimmers and shines
Lighting a path of love
From here to eternity~
I thought that was great, all of it was great but that stanza took my breath away. Beautiful Susan, as always.
Lynn -
Ah, what a truly beautiful piece of love poetry. It's so rare for a poem to be so beautiful without treading familiar ground, but this had a unique series of images and emotions.
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excellent+
Susan.....I would have found this eventually I know , but was sent to the page by Darmok who thought I might enjoy it. And in true fashion as always holds true...I did , it was so calming and soothing , a bit sensual and so full of love ...so thx Susan and Thx Sir Darmok for making me aware of it
Reenie*rose*
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omgs, just when i think you cannot further amaze me...you have. stunning piece hun. brilliant!!
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Fabulous
I want to hug you!!!! THIS is a wonderful poem. It is graceful and pulses with poetic shine. The rhythm is impeccable and the rhym does not strain to complete. There is a theme set to word, but it doesn't read like simple story text ...this is where your rhyming accentuates the combination of poem and narrative, and magically transforms this love message into magnificent poetry.
It's an accomplished poem to be very proud of Blushfull Moon, one to treasure as something magical and wonderous, having authored it from the imaginations of ones heart.....it remarks well of all that is within, and still ....more ...there to explore.
ps. yes...that's it...'classic style' indeed
Bravo! -Darmok...his head bowed
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Wheeeew this is very sensual ...beautifully written my friend.
At noon when the passions raged
In the howling winds and crashing waves
Churning up until we could take no more
Flinging us down on a rock-strewn shore~
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Susan
Truly Beautiful
Written is classic Susan~Style
Your words always paint the lovliest picture for me to linger in, this was absolutely stunning
Love you,
Karen
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only passions between two
can rise the mercury
within the moon
enjoyed this -
As usual a lovely piece from the mistress of love poetry..
The picture fits really well too.
Barb
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Don\"t Touch It!!!!!!!!
Wow Susan, this is simply beautiful, reading the words then to look at the pic, just seemed to take my mind right into the waves. Just gave me goosebumps!!! Your work is all beautiful and I really enjoy reading. Keep up the good work. love skipper -
deedee and michael thanks for your kind words
I dunno deedee i just write lol
and Michael yeah a new meaning for love on the rocks he he
Maureen 3 P's my my I never thought of it as passionate lol
Sherry thanks for the kind comments
Lordy
I hope I haven't left anyone out
Thanks so much all of you
Susan~~~~~
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So beautiful and tender Susan a lovely piece and wonderfuly written nice reflective images....Hugs,Sherry
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Passionate, Poetic, Perfect!!!
< 3 Maureen
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Just as beautiful as it can be, blushing one...:*
Gives new meaning to Love on the Rocks!!
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Susan
How the heck do you write like this I have to tell you that I really have no words
This must be Dawn speachless LOL
This was really love filled beautiful Susan
I loved these lines
I will love you when the moon hangs silent
Over the restless wine-dark sea
Beautiful girl~~ still trying to figure out how you do this
~~Dawn
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Punked Pixie
Ah hun
Thanks for your kind words and comment
I am blushing
Susan
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Pamela
My Ky cousin
I have given you things to think about
Hope its all good hun
Thanks for your wonderful comments
Luv ya
Susan~
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Patrick
Thank you for your visit tonight hun
And your beautiful comment
Luv you too
Susan~~~ -
Mike thank you for your kind words
Susan~ -
Beautiful write! The picture is gorgeous, and the words you chose were so passionate and loving. I adore this piece, and I'm bookmarking it!
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Ah Susan, this write has brought back so many memories for me..I always get such a lonely feel when i read of the sea & love..makes me want things that are lost to me..
You've given me much to think of here..beautiful things..
beautiful write..absolutely stunning! You've taken my breath away with this one..
much love Ky cousin
Pamela -
Gaze out on the endless tide,
where all of peace and grace abide.
Tell me if you still love me,
As I love the clear green sea.
You are such a lovely poet. your words are both calming and beautiful. be blessed sweet Susan Have joy you are greatly cherished.
Look out on the waves that flow,
Know that I still love you so.
Its a grand life if you live,
Giving all you have to give. -
Susan...
this is absolutely wonderful!
actually, i consider it a masterpiece!
blessed be
mike -
Thanks Celticmoon
For your wonderful and kind response
Luv ya
Susan~
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I am awestruck! This is simply and completely breathtaking.Your words truly bring the picture to life.So amazingly perfectly penned.A true and loving love story here.It really swept me away.
Spectacular Write Susan!
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Thanks Midnight
No need to bow your head
We each have our own style of writing
Yours is unique all in itself
Thanks for your kind words
Susan~~~~~
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*Sufice it to say an extremely beautiful peice, mon ami.Many thanks for reading my work.~bows head in embaressment~ Though it is by far uncomparable to yours.This peice touched a deeply buried part of me.Please keep up the amazing work.*
~Blessed be,
Midnight
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Daione my sis
Thanks for the kind words and I am trying to get back on track
So hard at times but I am trying
Eddy thanks for the visit ya big nut lol~
Susan~~ -
A beautiful write sis...but don't you just hate it when
you get sand in your buttcrack...
Hugs and love...
Eddy -
Now this is the Susan I know..Welcome back.
This so very sensual and I could hear the
ocean within the words. Amazingly vivid.
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Thanks so much Allissia
I always look forward to your visits
And also to you Mina you are such a faithful follower
Thanks so much all of you
Susan~~~~~
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Just absolutely breathtaking Susan!!
((That picture is just gorgeous))
and your words just make it more beautiful
Love the promise pledge at the end
I will love you when the moon hangs silent
Over the restless wine-dark sea
Where a golden sunset shimmers and shines
Lighting a path of love
From here to eternity~
((I will love you when the moon hangs silent
Over the restless wine-dark sea )))
Ohhhh hon that is soooooooooo Romantic ~
Such a loving and forever feeling
of enternal happiness...((Wonderful Susan))
Just Wonderful!!
Love to you Sweety Alwayssssss ~Mina :))) 
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this was so sweet. i love this. like i love all of your work.
keep it up my friend!!!!!!!
-Queen of the Damned aka Allissia Renee
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