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A Sad Poem

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A Sad Poem

O the wind danced across my face
Standing tall in the sun
Majestic beauty, golden lace
In wheat fields, my life had begun
Golden beauty, upon farm lands
And I cupped crickets in my hands
Golden beauty
Golden beauty
A carefree life with no demands

And then one day the harvest came
Taken to the baker
Turned into bread; O what a shame
Luncheon delight, hunger breaker
I’m a sandwich; to keep kids calm
Made for them, by a loving mom
I’m a sandwich
I’m a sandwich
With ham 'n cheese; held in my palm

Then one day, I was made for school
Fixed by moms’ loving hands
Put in the fridge to keep me cool
Go with the kids, those were the plans
They forgot me! Early that day
The next day too; what can I say?
They forgot me!
They forgot me!
O what a death, rotting away

 

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Option #5

Trijan Refrain

The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8
Form Resource: shadowpoetry.com

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  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 17
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    Ha-ha! I love it. I knew you would knock my socks off. Love that pic too. What a waste of good cheese.
    Amera, You are something else.

    Joe


  • Ithica silver member
    December 9, 2007

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    This is really cute! The refrain lines really amused me! I wasn't thinking of humor when I clicked this poem, what a pleasant surprise to get quite a giggle...


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 1, 2007
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    lol...you nut.

    lane XXOO


  • Angelic Princess21
    November 30, 2007
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    nice write. good luck in the contest.


  • Tarja
    November 30, 2007

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    Congrats on the gold trophy! OH MY GOD!! This really is sad!! I love the humor in this and at the same time there is actual sadness about that poor thing! Nice! This really wasn't something I was expecting ... but it was awesome. Thanks for entering. Good luck.


    • Amera gold member
      November 30, 2007
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      hehe.... thanks, "give them the unexpected"


  • Desire gold member
    June 3, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Ok me need to pick Your brain
    Brilliant write like Your others and Congratulations
    on Your Trophy win!!
    Loved this and Oh My Gosh~ What a picture You have
    and also painted in words
    Form Queen
    Loved this!!

    Many blessings to You
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    June 2, 2007
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    Congratulations on the gold, you deserved it.

  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    June 2, 2007

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    lmao, this is wonderful. You did such a perfect write, so pretty about rotting food, who would've thunk it? I'm sure you'll place, I hope you take it all. Great write, good luck in the contest.

    whisper


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    Oh tbis is really excellent! Thanks so much for this very fine entry in our contest
    Gaylene


  • Manoura xx
    May 21, 2007

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    As alwayz, an amazing piece, by the ever wonderful Amera!!! I Loved
    Love
    IN JULY!!!!hahha...


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    May 19, 2007

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    Wow this is so amusing and so well written. Gave me a laugh and insight into that creative mind of yours. It's GENIUS I say
    Love Lil


  • extasy
    May 18, 2007

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    This is like a really cool poem and it like rhymed good. I like the picture, it looks like mt ex-boyfriend’s teeth.

    ectacy


  • PerVirtuous
    May 18, 2007

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    I'd still eat it. This is very funny, very well thought out, and well metered and constructed. I give it: Three bunnies!


  • Swan song gold member
    May 18, 2007

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    My God you can make a poem about a sandwich good. My they broke the mold when they made you. Very well done


  • blueyez
    May 18, 2007

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    I saw the name and had to read it. I loved it. You are so creative. I felt bad for the bread. What a metaphoric story. Extremely well penned!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    May 18, 2007

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    Amera,

    LOL, an excellent fun write but there is some truth in this write you might not see, as I may well be like this sandwich by tonight. rotted and discarded down the disposal. LOL!



    Dad


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 18, 2007
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    Well penned, interesting form. I wish I had that sandwich now, what a waste!


  • Whoochi gold member
    May 18, 2007

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    what a unique perspective....Again, always amazing me with your special talents


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 18, 2007

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    Lol!!! When I saw the title I was ready to comfort you, so I readied myself and clicked in here...haha...this surely wasn't what I expected to find! This is hilarious! You make the perfect sandwich in such a controlled form, even if you are a little green and fluffy! Thank you so much for the surprised laughter, you're a very clever little lady indeedy
    La x


    • Amera gold member
      May 18, 2007
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      hehe... thanks Laura. I know the English don't consider peanut butter food but here it's a staple if life.

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