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The Last Farewell

Missing image

A sound I heard, but not defined

Upon the cool night air,

As if someone was in the room,

But I could not see them there.

 

The plant that graced my writing desk

rustled, as if by breeze,

Yet not a breath of wind I heard

Through the silent garden trees.

 

A perfume wafted on the air,

I knew the fragrance well,

And then a tiny dancing light

On my open notebook fell.

 

It hovered on the written word

That spelled great Egypt's name,

And on my hand I saw the glow

From that tiny moving flame.

 

His lips I felt upon my brow,

That tender last goodbye,

And the dancing light then vanished

But I swear I heard him sigh.

Author notes

This is a true story, we met and stayed in Egypt for some time due to his work as Egyptologist, he caught Nile fever and died in Egypt and is buried there, several days after the funeral I was sitting at my desk going through the notes we had done together when this happened, although I did not see him I knew it was he, the aftershave he used perfumed the room and I felt the kiss and heard the sigh.

The painting is of the festival of the Apis bull in ancient Egypt, the author is unknown to me.

Uncle Bud

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  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    May 23, 2007

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    Amazing. I have experienced similar things. The mysterious unknown is a curiosity to me. Well written. I am very much enjoying your work.


  • ZorroTheFox silver member
    May 22, 2007
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    this was an interesting write, keep up the great work.

  • aqua -rius
    May 21, 2007

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    Wispy images

    A tale nicely told. Several images- auditory,olfactory, tactile,and kinetic- are employed to create the feel.Reminds me of some movie.


  • penman gold member
    May 21, 2007

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    Excellent

    Such an incredible story you shared. You filled it the images and sensations to make us feel apart of the poem. Good luck in the contest.


  • badddgirl
    May 18, 2007
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    Please write Uncle Bud in author notes


  • badddgirl
    May 18, 2007

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    Wow

    This is amazing!
    I absolutely love it!
    I have goosebumps and tears in my eyes!
    Thank you for sharing!


  • crystaldust gold member
    May 18, 2007

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    crystaldust 19-05-07 01:31
    Deceptively simple this, my friend, and all the more beautiful for it. You and I both know the reality of such experiences and the truth of them. May that dancing light always be with you. mlj


  • suseann
    May 18, 2007

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    This is remarkable if even it wasn't true. But quite beautiful because it is. He's forever where his passions exist.~~Suseann


  • grannyeri gold member
    May 18, 2007

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    How can anyone doubt this when reading this from the person who experienced this? So many have had similar experiences and swear by them. This was easy to read and understand, and certainly does make on believe there are such things.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 18, 2007
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    This is beautiful Di, I've had some similar unexplained experiences such as this, lingering spirits and a whiff of familiar scent. Seeing from the corner of your eye but not daring to look in case they leave again; wise words spoken in silence. Glad I stopped by, it makes me feel less isolated Love you much. Laura


  • Tirrell
    May 18, 2007

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    beautiful ghostly tale, could be part of a great romance-- You have a great discription as if this had happened yesterday. I like this alot, a very inspiring write.


  • janejainejayne gold member
    May 18, 2007
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    Beautiful!

    Dear Di, This is so lovely and touching. To have lost a love is the saddest thing. He wanted you to know he was still with you. He will always be with you for the rest of your life. These moments do happen and we both know it. There is so much to learn while we live in this life. Your poem reflects the beauty that is your essence, dear girl! Bravo! Jane


  • Puppydog gold member
    May 18, 2007

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    DEEPLY TOUCHING!

    Our loved ones do come to us and say their last goodbyes for they do not want us to forget the love we share with them.

  • Moon Shadow
    May 18, 2007

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    Beautiful Poem

    Wow,what riviting experience. Being true makes it all the more heart wrenching.To know he came back to say one last goodbye.Absolutely wonderful,You composed a beautiful poem,and I wish you Luck in the contest.Take care,Moon Shadow.


  • queen Moderators member
    May 18, 2007

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    I think our loved ones are with us after they pass on. I have smelled the perfume of my grandmother on several occasions. To me it is very comforting. Your poem is awesome good luck in the contest


  • capricornpoet
    May 18, 2007

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    haunting

    Lovely hauting memory of someone cherished,
    Words flow to this specters hallowed visit..
    Lovely and inspired poem.

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