Erotic sighs
Silky thighs
Entrancing moans
Hungry groans
Skin caressing skin
Such a naughty sin
Blurry sights
Loving bites
Delving deep
So much heat
Pleasure attacks
Muscles contract
Tenders kiss
Unexplainable bliss
Author notes
Imagine yourself during intercourse...can you make one full understandable sentence? In this poem I went into the mind of a woman during intercourse, her mind so centered on her lover, she can't make a single full thought. =]
Hope you enjoy. <3
Please tell me what you think
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I usually am really picky with ryhming but I really enjoyed your poem. The concept was really quite beautiful.
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Nice write! It's cool how you made your idea into a really great poem. Very nice use of coplets too! Thanks for shairng!
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i liked the idea of what you were trying to create. i loved the poem- but a note of what you attempted to achive- it would be near impossible- all that goes through your mind is images, thoughts blurring on emotions ubable to pick a strand out to compose into a thought- not wanting to all your energy foucused on the moment- but this is still probably the closest iv seen- an amzing persective on your part
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Puts you in the mind of the lady you are loving, fully understandable.
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Yush!!!! I would say you captured it well, but in full honesty I don't know how a woman feels in her mind. this poem really gave me insight to that. thank you... *Kisses*
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