abandon me
send me back
label me emo
call me suicidal
make me bleed
take my love
enlarge my pain
cut my wrists
slit my arms
stab my heart
add more
leave me
let me be
go away
say nothing
forget about me
forget im here
add to my past
forget the changes
forget the effect
anounce me crazy
forget i was once happy
dress me in black
take away my clors
eliminate my smiles
pretend i was never here
keep going
black makeup
black lipstick
black nailpolish
dark red puddles
broken glass
shattered blades
send me to my mother
send me into the arms of the pedifile
swollen eyes
hott tears
once green, and yellow eyes now
black and cold
once warm and loving heart now,
shattered and broken
now cold as ice
increase suicide rating
living up to everyone's expectations
forgetting happiness
changing life
change my name
change my hair
take my friends
take the little loving family i once had
send me back to sexual harrasement
turn me back to annorexia
place me back in harms way
once a cutter alway's a cutter
once depressed
alway's depressed
pain lingering
grave dug
daggers tip dripping red
skin sliced, cut, bleeding, damaged
heart torn, shattered, cold as ice
pen and paper's my only friend
everything else tooken away
i cant go back
but i have to
forever abandoned
forever hurt
forever broken
alway's crying
alway's broken
cementary gates open
church bells ringing
a little bit of love showed
only a few attend my funeral
change my life
end my life
call me suicidal
call me crazy
lable me emo
to late for help
already there
already gone.
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wow this is really well written,, once in their life everyone feels this way,, so yea i really liked your poem it rocks!!
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Your poem was great... you are truely a poet however there are a few spelling errors. On the 24th line colors is miss-spelled and on line 37 hot has two t's. Line 64 the verb should be taken not tooken. Lines 70-71 the word always shoudn't have an 's.
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im.. not gonna say anything bad.. but what i do want to say, is that all this u have used above.. its so cliche... like serisouly.. who HASNT got an emo poem.
but ok. i must admit.. its sorta powerful. i wouldnt call it deep though.
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I read this to my husband and he agrees it is very powerful, and tells an entire story - it builds as gets more intense with every line. I would enter this into a dark contest if I were you. Also change the background to go with the dark theme.
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read my average poem- it's a lot like this. You can find it in my list on my page called tough moments. It is like this poem and it won me a gold. I don't think the people who commented so far really understand what the art of poetry is about. You need real poets reading. But putting them in the shameless box isn't gonna do it. Spend a few points to feature it, or else put it on the list to reward points if people read it. It really is not as bad as you think, or as these two commenters below are saying it is.
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weird? This poem is not weird. Perhaps you just feel weird about writing such vunerable feelings. This is great, creative, and could easily win you a gold in a contest. Very great poem.
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Uh, this is uh... I don't know. I think I agree with the list thing. You can incorperate these things and lists, but that's all it seems to be. I don't know, if you need help, thinking of a new i idea, let me know. i have some, i think.
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Hello BP,
Well it can't be a stupid poem because it isn't a poem to start with. It's a list. Apply the poetry part then ask this question again.
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