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~Redemption~



Mixed within turbulence we find ourselves
caught unbalanced inside the undertow of life,
Drowning within the murky waters of survival
Gasping for air holding on by a brink,
Submissive to our emotions wave after wave,
And before blackness can embrace us we are
touched by the hand of God,
And our spiral down becomes our stairway
Of light.
And step by step our redemption begins.

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  • Aodes
    June 9, 2007

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    Excellent

    Interesting and captivating association with the artwork provided. You speak of turbulence and waves of emotions which really gets to people at times, and when we get too caught up, we must have done wrong unto ourselves and others... thus our need for redemption. I like how the spiral clears up to become a stairways of light, which hinted that all it takes is a change of perspective in Life to make all the difference.
    Nice flow and meaning. (=


  • CherylAnn
    May 26, 2007

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    This is just beautifully written,The meaning is so overwhelming and it was well thought out.I love how you have shown the battles that are not so easy.But in the time of need God will hold out his hand and rescue us.Great penning and Congratulations on the Gold...A write worthy of Gold...
    Blessings
    ~Cheryl~

  • Cinnarry gold member
    May 24, 2007
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    Absolutely stunning. Bloody stellar write.

  • Mercury Rising
    May 22, 2007

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    Exceptional

    Really wonderful, and surely deserving of the gold trophy. Thanks for sharing your marvelous talents.

    David Michaels

  • ChaosChicklette
    May 21, 2007

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    Holy crap! And you said mine was good. This is amazing. I don't even hold a candle. I like how you explained the waves as emotion and that we don't control it. This is really good.

  • -lk-
    May 19, 2007
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    BRAVO!!!

    Congrats on the Gold! A truly deserving win


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 18, 2007

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    Bravo! Standing In Applause!

    - WOW.
    My heart skipped a beat reading this exceptional verse. My friend - amazing work. Truly superb. ~Pamela

  • -lk-
    May 18, 2007

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    "And our spiral down becomes our stairway
    Of light.
    And step by step our redemption begins."


    Oh! I absolutely love your ending here! What a hopeful message you have been inspired to write from the visual~


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    May 18, 2007

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    Oh this is just beautiful! Such darkness becomes our spiritual saviour. You certainly took this picture to it's 'nth' degree.
    Wonderful penning. Thanks for this very fine entry.
    Gaylene

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