I have become addicted.
Yes, like I was hooked on crack.
To a drug sold at the check out
In a little yellow pack.
Inside is my new heaven
Those orbs, to me, are gems.
Hard candy choclate covered
Peanut M&M's.
Author notes
I love Reeses Pieces
A contest entry
- Unique Contest for Fun-Loving Writers! by Jadegreentiger.
600 points, ended June 1, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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mmm tasty lol very nice, wish you the best of luck
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FUCK.
this had me LAUGHIN.
I love this.
really.
wow.
awesome.
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Thank you for entering my short poems contest. Haven't we all been addicted to sweets at one time of another. But at least they don't melt in your hand.
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LOL!! This is clever and hilarious. Great job!!!
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I really liked this one here. Thanks
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I love how at the beggining i was like oww great another whiny addiction poem and then you end it with peanut M and M's that s one creative idea. Stopped me from hating ths poem too. LOL
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What would we call this addict? A M&M-head? LOL This was great. There's no promotion of crack in this piece just words that make the reader know the candy is addictive. I love M&M's, and yes...they set them at the check-out counter for a reason. LOL This is an excellent jingle. Thanks for placing it in my contest. Good luck to you.
april nicole
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yummmy! very cute. Best of luck here.
great job
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Cute write.
Thanks for entering it in my contest
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Great piece!
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This write was so cute, I had to comment again!
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- - - HAA!!! I love this write!!
"I have become addicted.
Yes, like I was hooked on crack."
By GOD - that made me go back & read it again! Insanely funny to me.. Peanut M&M's - ahahh!!
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Thank you for entering my contest. I will be making my final comments at the contests closing good luck
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Very cute! I like it.
Have a wonderful day and good luck in the contest,
FallenPoeticAngel -
You have a much better grasp of rhythm then I do... it reads like you just spit it out one day in a normal conversation. Now I have to go practice more... thanks for the inspiration!
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COOL AND FUNNY!
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Tight rhymes and great form.
Nice use of hyperbole - love the poetic pivot at the end
Good luck in the contest!
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Man, I love this write! (you might want to check the rules, though!) Very cute!
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