Breathless
Emotionless
But alive
Every minute counts
Believe me when I say
Everythings fine
But nothing really is
Eternal love we shared
But none of that matters now
Envy is the new happy.
Beneath this flesh
Erupts a hell so unbelieve
Beauties can't even comprehend
Everytime I think of you I can't help
But laugh
Everytime I see your
Body laying there
Emotionless,
Breathless,I just wanna scream
Everyone thinks I'm crazy
Believe me I am sane
Eventually I will bring you back
Back to show them.
Everything that you did to me,
Believe me now
Everything is ok,
But nothing is alright.
Author notes
It's about a man's struggle with his life long partner who died who was abusive to him.
A contest entry
- The Second Battle of the Poets Contest! by Previn.
540 points, ended September 6, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like the beginning, it started off with good pace.
I got a bit muddled towards the centre but it ended off nicely
I also like the way you laid it out.
Thanks for entering -
hmmm...interesting...good luck
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i like this
at some point in time it should that not only the women get abused but the men do as well and then there is the children and the parents and the grand parents life is sometimes such a mess but God does all things for a reason keep doing well
love the papa -
o
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