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Angel of Mercy

The angel of mercy was broken in two
From all the emotions she'd been going through
Three Sacred Heart sisters were all at a loss
Waiting there on the station down at King's Cross.

The station hand's whistle was filling the air
As the commuters were waiting but just didn't care
They were all in a hurry to catch a train London bound
Into the city where their office is found.

The old locomotive was so polished and clean
As it stood at the platform all wreathed in steam
The carriages were all lined up like soldiers behind
The leather seats waiting for the passengers to find.

The angel of mercy began boarding the train
As the three Sacred heart sisters' went back home again
The guard blew his whistle and signalled the driver
Who was smoking a capstan; he was a world war survivor.

The old locomotive began to huff and puff with the strain
As the station hand went back to his tea and scones again
The train rattled and hummed along the old track and rail
As the houses in rows shot by like fencing pales.

Across country and forest all colours of green
The train and its' cargo were lulled into dreams
Away across rooftops and old church-top spires
The steam from the engine rose higher and higher.

Passed copse, glen and sacred grove to a place at worlds end
The old locomotive came to a slow stop once again
While back in God's own country in this old sceptred isle
The angel of mercy sat back and she smiled...

Author notes

Something that began as a few lines that popped into my head in the wee early hours of the morning & evolved into what you see here... pure whimsy...

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  • Ftw lol
    June 27

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    I tihnk I read this before. Even before you put it in my contest. And then and now I have to admit. I reaaly love this poem! Great job!


  • ASmileForYou
    December 11, 2008

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    This is absolutely beautiful. THe ending is perfect for this poem. Truly captivating!


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    June 3, 2008

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    Thank you very much for your entertaining entry into our children's contest it was a pleasure to read, although your flow could be improved in places.
    Please join us in our future contests, we look forward to reading more from you...Sue and Jeff


  • Angelflower
    April 15, 2008

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    Bravo!!! this was truly beautiful.. I loved the ending.. Well done!
    Jetleena


  • tawk gold member
    September 10, 2007

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    A beautiful and uplifting write. So full of amazing imagery and emotion. I so enjoyed reading. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 31, 2007

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    Across country and forest all colours of green
    The train and its' cargo were lulled into dreams
    Away across rooftops and old church-top spires
    The steam from the engine rose higher and higher.


    love this part of your poem


  • Nam
    July 26, 2007

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    I felt when reading this that more punctuation could be used in the proper places; this seemed "prosie/poesy" to me; and I felt it would strengthen the story more. If you do not have a good grasp on punctuation, then I would consult someone who does to help out in such regard.

    Also, I felt it could be a tighter read, more condensed in the line structure - perhaps more formed.

    Other than that, a nice piece.


  • aeolia
    July 18, 2007

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    ...I could have sworn that I'd left a comment on this, but apparently I haven't. Great rhyme. Great idea. I wish you the best of luck in my contest!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    July 2, 2007

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    She is a very beautiful and good angel indeed... For I hold no mercy at the moment I'm afraid to admit. ahh, well, I can dream and hope and wish that things will get better. Thanks for entering.


  • Wonderwhenitllrain
    June 19, 2007

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    This is really pretty.
    i really love this
    It really flows and travels well, never going off course.
    Great job and thanks for entering


  • Sgt B
    May 22, 2007

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    Ah ha!

    I really liked your story and the twist at the end. I would have had problems ending this one as It calls out for more! Great staory. Rhyme was Good and the flow was nice indeed. Thank you for entering my contest & good luck.

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