Do I wish to look in the mirror
and see that scheming face,
the little plans
always in ashes
the eyes hidden
by flashing lashes,
the fountain drying up
the high sheriff fast
upon my heels?
I dare not
let the full force of my fury out,
it would shatter me
and have little effect
upon the world without.
A world divided
a world of faith
and half of it is evil
the other half sick.
Little worms
crawl between my toes
I spear them
with my fingernail
I worship
from your thigh.
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Written July 29th, 2003
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i ENJOYED this tirade. Still trying to get to grips with it. You have a powerful style. A lot gets packed into each short line. Examples are:
"A world divided
a world of faith
and half of it is evil
the other half sick."
I also like:
"I dare not
let the full force of my fury out,
it would shatter me
and have little effect
upon the world without."
The alliteration of f's in "full force of my fury" seems to continue in "effect" and the rhyme of out with without makes this stanza so punchy.
Very nice.
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