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From the Inside Out

I'm so lonely
Inside of my mind
Parts of me
I dare not find
Suicide looming near
Death whispers temptations
In my ear

Author notes

Should I add more to this poem? It seems to end, but I'm not sure if it really does.

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  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    May 22, 2007

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    Dark thoughts can drive us further than we really want to go. Think about your life before acting out what this poem is suggesting.


  • gdshadowchick
    May 17, 2007
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    Not bad. Short, but sweet. Keep at it.


  • horrorfanatic
    May 17, 2007

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    i think you could add more, but its good the way it is now. i like the rhyming

  • fugee
    May 17, 2007
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    great piece. Hope you're feeling better