Morphine {laced} kisses
x//Toxic\\x death wishes
....Tattered and bruised....
B r o k e n and used
Your lies slowly tattoo my heart♥
I知 just sitting here waiting....I知 falling a p a r t
As this silver blade enters my skin
I feel the pain and start to ((grin))
Inside I知 screaming
Outside I知 bleeding
As my dreams turn into {nightmares}
I //scream\\ and I //scream\\ but nobody cares
Glittery tears .:glisten:. on my face
I知 f
a
l
l
e
n I知 b r o k e n and such a disgrace
As I知 lost in your :.metallic.: abuse
I知 comfortably numb hollow...with no use
Author notes
Word Bank!
A contest entry
- 203;203;203;203;203;203;​​;​;&#& by WhatLiesBeneath.
690 points, ended July 15, 2007, 52 entries
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GREATNESS
geezers nat!! i smell some talent
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'Your lies tatoo my heart', that's an awesome line. Great imagery and I love the shaping within this. Very well done.
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wow i dont know what to say for this but i liked it a lot
your punctuation was as cliche as ive seen so many times
the lines a few i have heard before but you use them well
thanc for sharing
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That was amazing! I totally agree with FingerToTheTrigger, it flowed really well. Very deep poem, and just an awsome job
. "Inside I’m screaming
Outside I’m bleeding" Love that part. Keep up the amazing work
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Woah. I loved it. It was worded amazingly and it just flowed so so well. The way you used the wordbank was fantastic. I'm not a fan of stuff ryhming dirty pretty stuff, but I did really enjoy reading this poem. I suppose it was just how you worded it and made everything just fall into place, that's what I really loved about it. Thanks for entering.
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you out did yourself with this poem. it is great, i mean you have left me speechless. this also makes think about emotions that we can feel as in anger, love, hate and fear. this poem sends chills down my spine.
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grgeat poem!!! Awesome job
my fave part is
As my dreams turn into {nightmares}
I //scream\\ and I //scream\\ but nobody cares
Glittery tears .:glisten:. on my face
I’m f
a
l
l
e
n I’m b r o k e n and such a disgrace
great job!
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NATALIE!!!!!!!! i love it!!! it is awesome!! Dirty Pretty is an awesome way to go!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love you!!!
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dirty pretty is the way to go!!! yay i really like this alot!!! good job babe
yay i hope to see even more soon ok?
hearts and stars
chrissy
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YAY!!!
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wow
when i say this, i really mean it
this is probably one of the best poems i have EVER read
especially in a time like what im going through.
this was absolutly amazing
each and every word
your rhymes were perfect.
this poem was perfect.
im nominating this to front page.
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Well thanks! I really didnt think that this poem was that good but if you really think so thats good! Thanks alot!
♥ and stars!
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Prettiful...emotional. See Natalie this is why people call us morbid and/or gothic.
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