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Ripples
golden currents
filtering sands of time.
Beneath this paradise, buried
below crystal silhouettes, entities
of creatures now awaiting new
tides. Starfish shall awake,
sand dollars surf
ripples
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Author notes
A
Rictameter
Syllable count:
2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2
The first & last ( two ) syllable
word/s should be the same ~
A contest entry
- Short Lived Short Form #23 by Samplette.
450 points, ended May 20, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Excellent
What a fantastic Rictameter.
Well done my friend.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents and creativity with us.
*S* Cynthia
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I've never done forms, but I love this, its so beautiful, your words, and all that you've put into it...now I not only am engulfed by your writings, I want to learn me..THANK YOU!
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A poem well done.As you pepbably realise by now I am not a forms person but this doesn't stop me enjoying your beautiful words, Ros
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Lovely
Oh what a delightful Rictameter that was just spot on in its form and flow. A real pleasure to read and enjoy. ~Pamela
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Oh wow! This is absolutely brilliant! I am almost speechless, AGAIN!! You can do in restricted form, what most can't do in free verse! This is beautiful. Best of luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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I wrote a song one time called the sands of time. It's always been a fascination of mine as well as crayons... lol. This closed really smoothly which I find hard to do in these diamond shaped forms. Excellent imagery. Well done.
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This is beautiful. I love this form. It's not easy, but a challenge that's well worth the effort when it works out.
nice job. hope you do well in the contest. -
waaaaaaaaaa I don't want to count syllables lol..
I just want to read this wonderful poem, And crave my time at the seashore, aaaah you have given me a bit of it within your words,
Thanks for sharing your big OLE teddy bear.
Love and Light
TEarz
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What a great write my uncle!!!!! I love it. You are soooooo good with these! Best of luck in the contest!
Love ya
Nyetta -
Awesome Possum
this is great piece on sands of time.. I enjoy doing form as well.
Yvonne
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Wow!!
Holy Moly~ What a verse You have penned!!
Love the message You bring forth and of course the
form
Wooooooooooooo hoooooooooooooooo
Form King~
and this is one of my favorite forms
too
-bows-
drops
Thanks for the Inspiration
Best wishes to You in the contest!
(not like You need it...Geesh)
Many blessings too
and much love~ Sissy Desire~*~
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Beautifully and wonderfully written, brother bear! Very well done! Wishing you all the very best!
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A truly wonderfully written rictameter. Your words are soft and inviting, allowing the reader to not only see, but to feel your words come alive. Thank you for entering the contest.
Sam
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Thank you Sam ~
I am so honored to enter your contests ~
Thank you for such a lovely review my Friend~~
Bear ~
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I see we both are inspired by the sea. Lovely rictameter combine lanturn.
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you build the promise of dreams and water nicely. You provoke the awakening of seeing the promise and potential where it would be easy to only see the wasteland. Once again you have nicely risen above the form and created a poem and a vision.
Love, Tom B.
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