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...The Healing Fusion of Light...

 

...The Healing Fusion of Light...

 

 

 

/\
Live
my life
in coldness,
no words no song.
-o0o-
Senses starved of hope
one shaft of light I strive for,
small gap in half opened door,
yearning for shadows.
-o0o-
Embracing grief
in sweeping

hunt for
light
unsung
in my heart,
no beat no flame.
-o0o-
I pray for balance,
and caress on fevered eyes.
Save my spirit from demise
in weakest moments
-o0o-
Silence in loss,
my grieving

held in
dark

conveys
fears of life,
in tangled threads.
-o0o-
Then out from the blue
God replies to fretful prayers,
compassionate light he shares.
A new day has dawned
-o0o-
Comforting peace
gives back my
verve once
more
\/

 

 

 


 

Author notes

This is an anonymous contest, please don’t mention my name.

 


Wrapped in grief, but with God and friendships, I feel harmony is slowly being restored

-SMILE-


*Arkquain Swirl*


Credit for Form...Arkbear


Picture credit...Inebriantia

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  • blondone
    August 11, 2007
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    Hood-Wink

    Now this is beautiful love this form as well, your talent shines as I read the words ~ Love the line I pray for balance oh so true this is a beautiful write and I see A Gold so well deserved this is beautiful, just as you are Have a great day of Hood-Winking... we all love and miss you


  • paperparadox silver member
    August 11, 2007

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    Happy Hood-wink!

    What a fantastic format ~ really lovely to read, and very well thought through. Delightful word selection, and the whole thing literally 'flows' just like its shape.

    Very well deserving of the Gold! Brilliant poetry!


  • tawk gold member
    August 10, 2007

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    Hood-Wink!

    What a unique form. I just loved it! A very well deserved Gold!! Brilliant in so many ways. Wonderful form and flow.

    You have just been Hood-Winked

  • Virgoan
    July 16, 2007

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    Very good take on the form and the theme used.

    Thanks so much for sharing this exceptional piece. I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.

    ~VIRGOAN~


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    May 28, 2007
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    3 claps...9pts

    The Poetic Bandits


  • animated lies
    May 27, 2007

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    Delicate and seductive-- you've made a wonderful collaboration of words in this piece. Lovely indeed.

    animated ♥


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    May 27, 2007

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    Lilac,

    I have already commented on this but am still impressed by this write on re-reading. This is so touching and meaningful and the form is a work of art itself. WELL DONE.

    Dennis


    • -LilacThOughts- gold member
      May 27, 2007
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      To my brother Dennis...

      Thank you bro, I really appreciate you dropping by a second time to read and comment again...I think this form is a beautiful form to pen to

      Much love...
      ~sis


  • Lady-Pegasus
    May 27, 2007

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    A wonderful arkquain swirl it was perfectly executed and the added touches make its display excellent and breath taking! This was most certainly a well deserved gold, and I see the bear agrees! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e


  • grannyeri gold member
    May 26, 2007

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    What a wonderful form, poem, presentation and picture you have created here - gold, glorious gold for sure. Loved this and the way you used the gold colour throughout the poem as well. Really a sensational work of poetry you have penned here. Congrats.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    May 24, 2007

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    Outstanding!

    A beautiful heartfelt write. Skillfully crafted Arkquain Swirl. Very good flow and tone. Nice imagery. Lovely depth of feeling. You express your feelings so deeply in this piece. Very good word choice. Good alliteration and assonance. Congratulations on winning Gold, sis. Well deserved.


  • Twinstar
    May 23, 2007

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    This is just the most beautiful poem! It is just so deep and filled with deep emotion and flows on the page like liquid silk. The form is phenomonal, every word is simply perfect! There are really no words to describe this amazing piece! Congratulations on winning the Gold on this! wonderful job on this stunning poem!
    Love & light
    Debbera


  • Florida Sunshine
    May 23, 2007
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    OMG! This FANTASTIC

    Congrats On GOLD well deserved!!! NICE JOB I love it...


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    May 23, 2007

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    Wow, this piece was deep and filled with emotion. It has some lonesomeness to it but as your phrase suggests with God and good friendships, you can pull through. Cingrats on your gold trophy.


  • blondone
    May 23, 2007

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    Oh this is the most beautiful poem the way the words flow the form oh my this is a Gold for sure love this read I will bookmark this one Condgrads on the Gold....


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 23, 2007
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    Congratulations on your well deserved gold!


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    May 23, 2007
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    Well Done my friend!

    Lilac,
    Congratulations on the trophy for this very meaningful and touching poem, you deserve such recognition!

    Dennis


  • Sandygram silver member
    May 23, 2007

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    Very Heartfelt

    CONGRATULATIONS on winning the Gold. This was a lovely poem and so deserved to be a winner. I am so sorry for your loss. You take care. God Bless you. Sandy


  • Arkbear gold member
    May 22, 2007

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    This has taken my breath away ~

    I could stare at this for hours on end ~

    When I came to acknowledge this entry

    a few days ago, I had to force myself to not read it ~

    I saw the beauty and kept looking away....but I knew I had

    to do a syllable count first ~

    *Bear was biting his teeth wanting to read it*

    The wait was well worth it ~

    With the permission of this Poet,

    I would like to know if I can place this on my Authors' Page

    after this contest is over ~

    Flawless Page layout/matting ~

    Title is so befitting the Art which inspired this write ~

    Colours chosen fabulous ~

    Grammatical choices superb ~

    Creativity within guidelines of an Arkquain Swirl....fascinating ~

     

    The Theme is sensational....so heartfelt & thought provoking ~

    NOTICE!!!!

    I can not find one thing wrong with this poem......

    ......except........>>>>>

    a sliiiiiiight distraction because of the orange colours in between

    each of your stanzas...............but..........

    ........I wouldn't have done it any other way ~

    ~ Minus .001 pts for that ~

    And one more note......

    ......and this does not mean it is *wrong*....but...

    ...I feel that this poem is written soooo well, that

    your pronunciation goes unnoticed....yet I am

     not a fan of it.....unless......it is absolutely necessary ~

    But...as I said....it goes unnoticed and I applaud you for

    being able to imprint it into your write and still,

    allow for 100% aesthetic appeal....terrific flow.........

    oh heck....

    .....I could just go on and on ~

    I have two more poems to review,

    and this certain write has Gold written all over it ~

    It would take a miracle to top this write ~

    However........

    I just won the Poetic Seasonal

    Challenge today after 3 months of 10 Rounds,

     and I beat out some INCREDIBLE Poets......

    ......so ANYTHING is possible ~

    hehe

    There will be no points deducted from

    this write for pronunciation marks ~ 

    There is ONE last contest for the Swirl & the String

    for BIG points coming up!!

    Winner takes ALL !!

    I hope to see this Poet enter ~

    ( - . 001 pts )

    SCORE:   99.999%

    SMILE!!!!

    You should be proud Poet ~

    Bear ~


  • sheltered
    May 22, 2007
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    Excellent write and i'm happy to hear that harmony is being restored.


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    May 18, 2007
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    This is a lovey and tenderlook at recovering from grief and loss. The tears you shed were not in vain but an natural part of the healing process. It is a process which cannot be rushed, it comes in its' own good time but the relief is so sweet and the pain subsides.

    Your writing of this time placed in this Arkquain format is a winning combination of shared wisdom and artful expression. Good sharp images, thanks for sharing.

    Dennis


  • Arkbear gold member
    May 18, 2007
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    Thank you for this Elegant Entry ~

    Please forgive me ~

     

    I can not acknowledge your entry

    by a personal IM this time, because

    this is an anonymous contest

    and I don't have your names

     in front of me ~

     

     

    My mistake...I apologize ~

     

    Perfect syllable count !

     

    Thank you!

     

    I can not say any more per say the rules ~

     

    If you have any questions about your entry,

    please refer back to the Rules on the Contest Page ~

     

    Thank you for taking the time to enter and

    the best to you in this contest ~

     

    Bear ~


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 17, 2007

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    Breathtakingly beautiful in shape and content. I am so sorry for your loss.

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