Life! Dwindles
Dreams! Subside
Stalked for a Lifetime
With no place else left to Hide
As your pendulum Slows
Life is no longer future but only Past
So how will you be Remembered
And what will be, Your Epitaph!
Will it be, The one who always looked Forward
But never had Time to reach Back
Or the one who forgot from whence they Came
And their responsibility to That
A Life full of open Pathways
But now standing at Death’s Door
Blind is the person in Life
Who fails to see the color of , “The Dark Toes”
Zero Hour, Clock Stopped
Time forever Froze
Now you lay upon the slab – Completely Colorless
Except for, “The Dark Toes “
They say your Life flashes before your Eyes
And your final thoughts are Scrambled
To truly understand the Artist’s Design
You need only one phrase be unraveled
That is, How will you be Judged
For you Reap, What you Sow
Death’s Tapestry is very Simple
It’s the color left behind in...“The Dark Toes”
Unscrambled: The Dark Toes = “DeathStroke” (Blood Red)
Don’t Waste it, For Life’s Blood is Time
and eventually all shall run out.
Peace
Holla @ Ja Boi
TX Leonard
A contest entry
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I am floored with this write-it goes way beyond good. The message is presented powerfully in a dynamic manner. Truly, what do we leave behind? Our only lasting tangible marker is our epitaph. We all came into the world the same way and we leave basically the same in that we all die and death is death. And then, as I believe, we come face to face with our Creator and He poses the question to us-"What did you do with your life? Did you love others, as I have loved you?"
Again, this made for a wonderful read and I'll be by to catch more of your work~
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i really enjoyed reading this. it had a really nice flow. and i love the way you rearranged the letters in the dark toes. i loved the imagery and emotion in this poem also. awesome job.
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This is good, you're a talented writer, it had nice flow to it
I hope to be reading more of your writes soon, and keep up the good work,
All the best,
~Stephi-Dawne~
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. you have a great flow and your flow lets us see your words.
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Hey, yes, I really enjoyed this. Great expression my friend!
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Thanks for the positive feedback Animarising.
I appreciate that.
if you enjoyed the Dark Toes. I believ you'll also enjoy Living Insanity, Other side of Zero and a few others. Hope you enjoy and Thanks for reading and giving the positive feedback.
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Lots of imagery I find here great flow in the words written full of emotions all this togather makes for a great read
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wow
loved the transference from black toes to blood-red toes. smartly done
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Wow!
This is so incredibly amazing! You are a great poet! I loved this piece, it was wonderful! I loved the wording and the way it flowed! Great job, this is wonderful! -
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Thank you very much for the awesome feedback. I truly appreciate you taking thetime to read, connect and enjoy my poem here. Again thank you very much for the EXCELLENT feedback
I'm like WOW to your comment here
I appreciate that
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thumbs up for toes!
very insightful and emotionally moving poem.
some good rhyming and structure.
nice dark atmosphere of time and clearly projected imagery.
you entice the reader think much more deeply with this.
i like your style and talent.
i particularly admire your very memorable 2nd verse...
**As your pendulum Slows
Life is no longer future but only Past
So how will you be Remembered
And what will be, Your Epitaph! **
The Dark Toes [= “DeathStroke” (Blood Red)] is a very interesting new expression you have taught me.
i look forward to reading more of your poems soon.
thanks. best wishes
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as always amazing your such an amazing poet. and ive missed reading your work
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