Thoughts Scattered, Focus Shattered
Forgotten memories of the times I Had
Hard to think, Gone with a Blink
How could the good life have gone so Bad
I remember the Cliques and the Corner Tricks
And Slingers all across the Way
You use to live next door but now an abandoned Door
As only darkness is the light of my Day
Blood filled nights, Gang Fights
Pulling bullets from our bedroom Walls
Nighttime screams and tortured Dreams
We tallied our score from the dead on the Floors
Is this the Life we Live, of hatred and Strife
Lord!!...Have you left us on the block for Dead
Yet another yawn to yet another Dawn
Too Baddd...
That this shit was just all in my head...
~Mental Block~ Get It
A Little Thoughtful Humor There
LOL
Peace
Holla @ Ja Boi
TX Leonard
Please tell me what you think
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i think it is voiolent and depressing. two fav bits are the scattered and shattered and the yet another dawn. I din't like the door... door in the one line maybe put in threshold or something. my emtional response is that of sadness. I think the title should realate to the poem because there is nothign blocking anything in this poem, you just shoot it all down.
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But thanks for the comment it did help me translate the meaning of this write even though I knew the meaning in my head. I guess I had another kind of - Mental Block LOL
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I believe you missed the entire point behind the poem. Mental block. The street you may live on in your mind. Get it. It was all in my head "Mental". A street in any city "Block". Thereby - Mental Block but I think you missed it. "Any street living made up in the mind - "Mental Block". that's why the last line reads "Yet another yawn to yet another Dawn. Too Baddd...That this shit was just all in my head...
Nightmare Dream - Mental Block
wheewwww!! I guess I really had to break this one down huh!!
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@__@ wow ..... i dont know what to say .... @__@ wow .... very nice ...
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Thanks you
for the excellent feedback comment
I truly appreciate that and I will return the favor. I just popped on and had to say thank you for your awesdome response
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i love it!!!! i need more lol
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AMAZING!
This piece is amazingly written! I like it a lot! It flows well and the syntax is amazing! NICE JOB!!
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