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There is a Pinhole In My Wall -

It is small and insignificant,
barely even noticeable.
One would have to have it pointed out
in order to see it -
a pinhole that once held the pin
that once held my calendar
(or was it a picture? or a letter? or a card?)
in its place.
There are people in that pinhole,
places and memories
all huddled in that pinpoint of time,
soon to be patched up,
painted over,
forgotten.
Fixed.

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  • tinuelena
    July 14, 2007

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    Interesting. Definitely an instance of poetry about everyday things. The modernists would be proud of your objectivity.

    Elizabeth


  • Tamera
    July 13, 2007

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    Who would of ever thought there was so much in one small pinhole. Great write, Unique perspective on an everyday occurence.


  • theredcatjazzoflove
    June 15, 2007

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    This was a very different read for me I must say

    i read it 2 times so I can grasp your voice in this write and I am glad I did it had a sorta different type of twist to it,


  • bethan-gaze
    June 11, 2007

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    What a fascinating topic ... I will always be thinking of this poem next time I hang a picture on the wall ... x


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2007

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    I like this one because you've found poetry waiting in the most mundane of things ~ a hole in the wall. I've written several poems about paper clips myself. It strikes me as odd when people complain about having writer's block when there is poetry to be found in everything, everywhere, if we only look. Actually, I think you could elaborate even further on this theme, strengthen the images somewhat. As for the ending, I choose to think "fixed in memory" rather than erased from view. Well done, Poet. Wanda


  • Janice M Pickett
    June 7, 2007

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    This has promise

    I like the thought behind it. Its clever.
    However you may want to edit your it to It at the beginning and remove the : for a fullstop.a for A. The rest is really great. WELL DONE
    A really good Poem.
    HUGS
    Jan


    • trumpetfalcon silver member
      June 7, 2007
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      Thank you for your comments - I actually had the capitolization and the endstop originally, but my prof. changed it.

      I'd be happy to change it back!

      Thanks again!

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